Dang long but you can keep some ones attiion with your words i loved it
rock out

A very interesting way of writing... you got a good messag through and most of it had a very nice flow... The ending was also very good with the IT-IT-IT...

I think this was a rather good poem so yes do finish the story =)

Good work =D

This is unlike anything i've ever seen before..
It was outstanding, i loved the way that 'IT' could have been anything..
You really portrayed how these things get ahold of you untill somewhere down the line, you come to the realization that you're no longer in control..
5/5
*Gem*

(Thank you for the comment, it meant a lot coming from someone like yourself =)

Stephen White I LOVED it its a way of writing which i swear i havent seen before at least dont think i have! i would like to read the next part so please do post it!
well done cant wait to hear the rest mel x

Stephen White I LOVED it its a way of writing which i swear i havent seen before at least dont think i have! i would like to read the next part so please do post it!
well done cant wait to hear the rest mel x

Wow, very long poem. but wow it was penned perfect. I loved how it was written. Great job! I can't say anything else. WEll done! God Bless 5/5 Thank you for the comment and rates on my poems.
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Wow, this is a fantastically written peice. I know so well how drugs can consume your life. One of my best friends got expelled, tons of community service and was put on probation for getting caught with drugs this year. I totally screwed her over, but now she's getting better.

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