Comments : We shine

  • 16 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    I liked this, the beginning stanza was truly amazing, and it reeled me into it right away. Love poems aren't so easy to write these days anymore, because they're all so cliched and once you've read a few of them, you've read all of them, but I did really like this one..and the title is what made me read it, and I wasn't dissappointed.

    5.5

  • 16 years ago

    by Finalgravedigger

    That was awsome. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    Awww David!! this is so beautiful! nicely done you did a fantastic, job!!! This is real beautiful love poem and I loved everything about it my favorite stanza was...

    It fills my heart with warmth and love
    My affection for you is true
    No one can love you more
    Than how much I feel towards you

    ^^ I absolutly loved that stanza <33
    nice work

  • 16 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Very romantic and sweet...I enjoyed reading these verses of love...all the best, Debbie

  • 16 years ago

    by Tammie

    Woah. I'm speechless. I enjoyed reading this so much. It's truely one of your best poems. The emotions in this are so raw and real, it shows how much you really love this person. Everything about it so well written. I can't choose a favorite stanza, I love them all. Excellent job. =] 5/5

    Tammie

  • 16 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Wow David, what a wonderful write. The rhythm and flow was great, but had a few bumps, which I'm about to explain. Alright, time to be very honest and blunt about your poem, so here it goes.

    This line, "And sing a perfect love tune together" You should take out the word, "together" so that it reads, "And sing a perfect love tune" I feel it flows much better that way.

    Also this line, "I love you till the end of time" kind of made me stop in the tracks of reading, it was roughly put there, instead try this, "I'll love you till the end of time" it flows much better in my opinion.

    Towards the end of the poem, it started to get a little off track with the flow I felt, but all in all the sweetness within this poem was great, it came straight from the heart, which made up for the lack of the flow and structure towards the end.

    Overall greatly written peice that had a lot of emotion within. Keep up the excellent work.

    Peace, Joe

  • 16 years ago

    by skynerraw

    "It fills my heart with warmth and love
    My affection for you is true
    No one can love you more
    Than how much I feel towards you"

    I really enjoyed reading that! It's so sweet, and full of emotion.....I think ^ is my favorite stanza, it just touched me :D
    Great poem!!!
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    David
    Very sweet love poem.

    I exist only to please you
    I walk the earth only for this
    To make you joyful and glad
    To wait for that one wonderful kiss

    I really love this stanza.
    Take Care Cindy

  • 16 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Fantastic. This poem was filled with love, sweetness, and undoubtfully wriiten for someone you cherish. The flow was great, the format, awsome, there is nothing that I can see that can improve this work of art. Again for a love poem it is truly in a league of its own.5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Stephanie

    Amazing poem. It has a lot of emotion and feeling. Very well done.

  • 16 years ago

    by xPerfect Chaosx

    Wow David. This poem is awesome. It's very heartfelt and wonderfully written. The flow and everything is magical. Love and devotion to one for eternity. It's an amazing poem. 5/5 for defintely sure!!

    Much Love,
    .:Danielle:.

  • 16 years ago

    by Boy

    Very romanting poem. take care 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Well done, David!

  • 16 years ago

    by Joe

    Please give me your writing ability