Your poem is great. It's awesome. If you want, you can read one of mine.

This is rel good i suspect your fairly new to writing poetry on here? anyways your stanzas were well layed out and in time and generally a good poem

xxx alex xxx

Thats great. i love the last stanza. very good message. great flow and good word usage. keep up the great writing!

That was unique. I have to say you did a really great job. the flow was almost flawless, the word choice is amazing and of course it is well penned, and well written. 5/5

A real good job ion this you dont havem any poems i see why not???? i demand answers lol your a goodpoet so i want to read more more more moreeeeeee lol jk hun keep writing though and ill keep reading. Stick yo on my favs os i dont lose ya lol :d

xxx alex xx

"like birds round' toons knocked out cold" I liked the idea of this line however I dont think that it fit to well with the rest of the poem.

All in all I really loved this poem. It was short and simple yet it had such a strong message. The last stanza was definatly my favorite. The last line so powerful it knocked me right off my feet. (thank goodness I'm sitting down). and being the queen of indecision I couldnt agree with you more.. it is a jail sentance. Amazing metahpores. I loved it.

Exellent , i loved it, again the ryhming is great, it comes naturally, 5/5

Great work.!!...different and aww...the rhyming is perfect...short..and yet well penned peice!...the last line was powerful in it's own special way..kp writing!
xxPoojaxx

The first part of this piece had alot of flow to it and read very well when the middle hit it seemed to go off and by the ending the flow was gone. The message was ok but the flow was so baddly dumped I just could see the work accomplished message Oh nice try. Plot121

Beautifully written poem, it is very original and topic is great. Last stanza is my favorite, this piece has excellent atmosphere and it deserves 5/5

I really love this poem and the way you use your words. nice work
5/5
<3 jackie

Love this poem, all I can say