Comments : Kissing You In The Rain

  • 16 years ago

    by cowgirlstar26

    :( thats really sweet...this line kinda hit home but yeah great write

    As I got off the bus I felt the rain hitting me
    I ran for cover but it was too late, I was soaked
    There you were, waiting for me in the shelter
    You smiled at me and I knew it made you happy
    ----------------
    I cant wait to read more

  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    WOW! Its just like watching a movie/Film! I'm really speechless 5/5! Darien = Amazing

    *I hope someone out there will heal my heart :(*

  • 16 years ago

    by ImNotPerfect20

    "I was wet, but you still hugged me tightly
    Pushing me back into the rain you kissed me
    It was the most magical feeling for us both
    Holding your hands and kissing your lips
    The rain poured down on us, but we didn't care

    It was love, it was the feeling we longed for
    Together in the rain, forever inseparable"
    My favorite part.. anyway.. this is awsome.. i love it.. nice flow.. 5/5 this poem has a lot of emotion in in.. keep up the good work.

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Great poem. It's sweet:) Keep up the great work. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    Hey,
    Well this poem was quite anjoyable. It had a good display of emotion and if i was asked to describe it in one word id say that it was really sweet. :)
    Ok the title of the poem, seems kindof fary tail like. "Kissing You In The Rain", it just makes me think of the "and they lived hapily ever after story". You carried on this concopet throught your poem. The first stanza, instantly shows how much you care for this girl. The secound and third stanza, shows that you were thinking of her throughout the bus ride. Again showing your deep feelings. The fourth and fifth stanza, show her feelings towards you. And then the last stanza seems to sum up the entire poem. I really thought it was like a fairy tale. To improve i suggest you use punctuation, but other then that a great read! Really sweet. :) xx

  • 16 years ago

    by carissalynn

    Awwww! How Dainty haha. This was cute! and well written WOOT 5/5
    Carissa [[=

  • 16 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    I must say it was a good write, Although; I felt it was more of a story than anything else, it was in poem format, but lacked the flow that a poem usually has. Anyways, you are a great love writer, we deffenitly need to do another collab sometime. Keep up the great works.

    Peace, Joe

  • 16 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Aww.. this poem is adorable.. an enjoyable read.. the title.. is very cliche and turned me away from the poem but when i read it i realized that it wasnt cliche at all.. you managed to use something as universally romantic like kissing in the rain without re-writing what has already been said and done thousands of times before.. the flow was off in places.. "I smiled to myself as I nodded" mabe im just reading it wrong but that seemed too short for the stanza.. but idk.. anyway the rest was excellent.. you desribed things around you well nad made things really vivid

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I found this poem quite enjoyable to read. the story that was portrayed throughout the poem was interesting not one part bored me. It wasn't cliche at all which is great because I'm getting sick of reading the same poems over and over, or so it feels i am. The imagery was vivid your description was really beautiful. I found this to be really sweet. The structure was fooling at first when i saw how the lines were set out (longer in some places and shorter in others) i thought that the flow would become off because you might of lost the syllable count. but i was wrong the flow was amazing and this whole poem was definitly beautiful. Guess that teaches me "Never to judge a book by its cover" Well done with this definitly a 5/5 from me. ~mel

  • 16 years ago

    by Jessica

    AWH. Darienn, that is soo sweet. I loveed it. The descriptions were great, the love really shone through, the flow was good and i just loved it. I hope it's true hunny, you deserve someone amazing. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by true love is waiting

    Keep on writing these poems because ur gud at them

  • 16 years ago

    by claire

    This was rlly good - is it a true story? seems really real, but at the same time like it could be totally imagined - same as, like, a really good, pretty realistic movie :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Estefania

    HEY REALLY SWEET POEM! REALLY LOVED IT!

  • 16 years ago

    by On Cupids Bad Side

    OMG how beautiful.. that was really sweet. I LOVED it.

  • 16 years ago

    by Marissa Marzano

    Naww
    how sweet..
    great job!

    Marissa

  • 16 years ago

    by WiNgS Of StEeL

    Hey this one is sweet and i enjoyed it very muchly:D
    keep it up aye:D
    tk care
    bree

  • 16 years ago

    by BeLLa

    NAWWWWWWWW ! this was such a sweet poem it was brilliantly written. it was such a beautiful poem and i no that alot of people can relate
    this is such a good write
    x

  • 16 years ago

    by JustKristina

    I love it, every girls dream.. thanks for capturing it in such a amazing poem..

  • 16 years ago

    by Devon

    Sweet!

  • 16 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    A real lovely poem full of emotion and love it was so good and well written xxx alex xxx