This was an interesting poem. I think I know what you're talking about but I'm not 100% sure. The flow was good and the rhythm had a simple and easy to follow beat. All in all poem was well written and enjoyable. 5/5.

I think you done a really good job on this! although im not quite sure what your talking about.. the flow and rhyme was really good! keep up the great work. 5/5

I had to really have a think about this but i like how you've written it, leaving a lot of gaps and unanswered question.
It gives the reader a chance to interpret the meanings of the poem by really thinking about it instead of just being told.
Excellent lay out!
5/5
*Gem*

Nicely written poem, and you have showed a different kind of message. great job.....
very differently written which is good.

a 5/5 from me as you really deserve it

I really like this poem. The way it is written just seems...
I dunno. Pretty. I like the way you didn't stick to any sort of stanza scheme, it gives it a bit of flavour. Good job :]

Good job!! =)))

Great job!...loved it...keep writng your really really good...

i love your flow of writing it really fits ur style
great job
5/5
~Shannon~

4/5 good poem, i do wish it stuck to some kind of poetry scheme but that is just me. Nice and unusual but very interesting. I love the way thoughts get formed into words by good writers for you surely are one.

Short, I wish it was a bit longer, but overall this was a good poem. I felt the flow lacked a little within this poem, I felt it was not one of your better writes, but you Vocab was good.

Peace, Joe