Beutifully penned....great choice of wrds!...loved it
Tk care!
xxPoojaxx

I really liked the beginning of this poem, but once it got to the two-line stanzas, I felt the piece lost rhythm, flow and depth. Also, because the forth stanza had five lines, I felt the rhythm was broken. I think, that if the piece had only the first six stanzas, with the forth one changed so that it matched the others, I would have definitely voted this poem a five. Speaking of only the four-line stanzas, this poem had great flow, rhythm, depth and wording. Sorry if I seem harsh, but I think that comments are suppose to be truthful opinions.

Brad

It's a good style of writing. Enjoyable!

Sam
Excellent job and I think this would make a good song...The words are enchanting.

Sweet tourniquet,
See my tears,
Touch my cheek,
And kiss my fears,

Loved this stanza.
Great job!
Thinking of you.
Love Cindy

Very good, i really enjoyed it, the repitition was good, and the flow was amazing. Great job, keep it up. Check out some of my poems, when you have the chance.

Best Wishes
Wallace

This was very nice, original, awsome poem. [[=
Carissa

Love it!!! I think that it would make a great song. Keep up the good work. *5/5*

♥ Alyson ♥

I really love this poem..........great work and can you check out some of my poems and tell me what you think.thankz....and 5/5......

GREAT POEM!!!!!!!!!!!

I see where you are going with this as song lyrics...however the flow is lost a bit in changing the length of the stanzas and the way the rhyme scheme is switched up. One spelling error...verse one, sole should be soul....all in all a nicely written piece....think it will make great lyrics!

This was truly a great poem!!!

If there were words that could describe this piece of absolut art... i'd definitely write em here.. you're AMAZING>. i love this piece.. ITS GOING TO MY FAV.S . .ITS SIMPLY SUPERB , each and every line , each and every meaning.. so damn moving.. so damn .. WOW..
this is just marvelous.. a w00-h00 @ this one :D .. 6/5

~Wake~