A picture of beauty (collab)

by The Poetic Child   May 6, 2007


Eyes that shine like Stars in the night,
Beauty that glistens bringing the brightest light.
A heart that glows giving me a drop of faith,
A soul that blinds me, As I gaze into her face.

A face so beautiful, sends chills up my spine,
I've seen no other that can be more fine.
Wishing this can last forever, for all eternity,
Dancing together for everyone to see.

The second she's gone i get a hole in my heart,
I just hate and regret every second we are apart.
I can't stop thinking of her beauty and laugh,
Sitting on my bed, gazing at this photograph.

This photograph, full of lost happy memories,
Memories of fun times she spent with me.
Days full of happiness, nights on the phone,
talking to her all day, but now they are gone.

Sunshine to Sunset, Sunset to Night,
Shes in my mind everyday and every night.
Such a feeling of happiness such a feeling of love,
A feeling that was sent down from The angels up above.

But the longer I think of her, the harder it is to subdue,
The love I feel for her the pain I have to go through.
As much as I love her, this pain I cannot forget,
So I'll stay here an eternity looking at her portrait.

*this piece was a collab. with Bryan*
http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/author.html?id=255211

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  • 16 years ago

    by robin milford

    Excellent poem

  • 16 years ago

    by paul alexander

    I love it

  • 16 years ago

    by Fluffy

    Beautiful. A heart rendering piece; you have used vivid imagery to deliver the message within this poem, and I must say it was delivered wonderfully through the constant rhyme that worked its way throughout. The only thing I'd suggest for improvement would be for this line:
    "I can't stop thinking of her beauty and laugh"
    As opposed to writing 'beauty and laugh', I would suggest alternating it to:
    I can't stop thinking of her beauty, her laugh".
    I think it becomes more effective as you are then using another poetic tool of repetition. Other than that, there are a couple of areas where minor adjustments such as proper grammar should be applied; but on a whole this is a well written and solid piece. Very well done :).

  • 16 years ago

    by ShaeBaeBae

    I thought this poem was amazing. probably one of my favorites now. keep up the amazing work!

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Like i've already said on Bryans account, I found this peice to be beautifully written with a nice flow and sweet emotions which rain throughout the whole thing nicely. Good effot with this. ~mel

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