Very good...explains basicaly exactly how i feel most of the time when i cut...5.5 <33

I think it sounds good,
very good poem vanessa,
love the flow and the choice in wording,
even the title is capturing
i give this poem a 5/5!!!
keep it up, this is very good!!!

Vanessa,

That was flawless. I seriously had a tear fall down my cheek, that was very emotional & powerful. The flow was great, the descriptions were vivid, & the word usage was fantastic.

"Crimson tears stream down my face
Oh how I wish to leave this place
Tried of pasting on a fake smile
My soul weeping all the while
My hands are slightly shaking
Due to all the drugs I am taking
I have fallen far from grace
To disappear without a trace..."

^ Those lines were just fantastic! Wonderful job, keep writing! 5.5

Stephanie Lynn .+.

Don't say that, i thought it was great. the flow and the wording was great, i really did see the poem within a poem. i liked the topic, it's generic but unique, nice job 5/5

Brillent job,
very deep with full of great vocab
nice style.
keep up the great work...

Powerful ending, I kind of wish you would have spent more typing expanding on "pain is not real." You reference it at the beginning, but immediately drift to other aspects of the poem. A few typos and a few problems with flow aside, I enjoyed the poem. Nicely done.

stanza1, line2. "by" implies that the narrator isn't really part of the action. "with" would imply that the narrator is consciously aware of his/her involvement. "with," I think, evokes more of a response.

stanza1, line6. flow: make "it is" a contraction.

stanza1, line8. wording: replace "that wait" with "from"

stanza2, line1. flow: make "I am" a contraction. *I like this line

stanza2, line3. wording: "zest" doesn't fit the feel of the poem - find a more melodramatic word for happiness

stanza2. flow: Combine lines 2 and 3, then add another line to explain more specifically what you are referring to in line4. when you write "things." Things is a non-descriptive word that confuses the reader.

stanza4, line1. I don't like "crimson" - word is overused and cliched and, although sometimes it's necessary, I think you can find another word that might work just as well (if not better).

stanza4, line3. wording: "pasting" not sure how I feel about this word, doesn't seem to fit, therefore obstructed flow a bit.

stanza4. besides my line1 & line3 comments, a very powerful stanza. Nice

stanza5, line5. flow - this line seems to fit better with the 6th stanza. It severely disrupted the flow. I tried to relate line 4 to 5, then assumed a new idea was coming up for stanza 6. Strongly suggest a entirely different line that integrates with the rest of the 5th stanza and perhaps working the original line into the 6th stanza. However...

stanza6, line1. I think if you change to "hoping would be an answer to my prayers." You won't need stanza5, line5. I feel I have enough information to infer that 'hoping' relates to the razorblade.

stanza6, line2. flow: make "is not" a contraction

stanza6, line4. wording: add "an" b/w 'in effort'

stanza6, line6. Very Awkward. typo? 'there' should be 'their?' Either way, still confusing. Consider revision

*ah, put a period at the end of line5. change 'there' to "there's." I didn't catch that at first - I read line 5 and 6 as the same thought. A period would break the flow.

stanza6, line7. wording: take out 'do"
stanza6, line8. wording: add 'the' before pain. Would emphasize pain in the poem.

I know I usually only right out my suggestions for change, but I enjoyed many parts of the poem (even if I didn't write that down). The sections I noted were especially well written. Good work

I loved it. You really made the formate work and I loved the poem within a poem thing. I don't think I would have been able to do that:) Another 5/5.

Wonderful poem! good choice of words! well done! keep writing :) 5/5

Great job, you might consider checking some of the spelling...there are a couple of typos that made different words...but other than that...super job! Best wishes 5/5 -unattractive1

Wow. I'm not sure I like this one, even though it is much better done than most cutting poems. I have a bit of an issue with such a poem, I am sorry.
I think the flow isn't the best, but it is still really nice in parts.
Kelsea

This is wonderful. i love it. i seen a couple of mistakes but its ok.. the flow is off a bit..(i dont care about flow others do thats why i said something). anyway keep up the great work.

I really enjoyed it
I like hard poems that are real and not something you'd say aww to.
You really have poems that are full of hurt and misery.
And I love it!!
I think you did an amazing job once again!
Well done!

It looked good on paper, and it looks good on this website. I couldn't stop reading :D. Awesome work

I love it.. I know it is hard to stop cutting, trying to do it right now. If ever ned anything iam here. other than that, I LOVE it!! Keep writing Pweaze!! ^_^

Erm yeah...to be brutually honest I wasn't keen. The subject (suicide) is vastly overused and this poem is also plagued with cliche words and images!! I prefer poems that are new and make me think "wow that's different." Not poems that make me think "not another one..."
Sorry to be harsh, but that's my opinion.

Wow!!!!! As i was reading this peom I couldn't take my eyes off the screen. It was very descriptive and I could feel and imagine evrything you wrote. After reading it, it leaves you speechless. Very, very good. I like!!!!!!!!!11

Wow.
That's all I can really say.
It flowed beautifully and seemed to just roll of the toungue when spoken.

Excellent poem, I really enjoyed it, keep up the good work. Check out some of my poems when you have the time.

Best Wishes
Wallace

Thats a really great poem i use to cut but then i realised that theres better ways to let out emotions... thats when i started writing poetry...
well everyone has there ways of dealing with things and at the time... cutting was my way but ive overcome that stage now and i think its a very big acheivement...

keep up the good work.

It looks like a song..i mean it could be good sad song
I dunno if it's just me thinking like that but i think this way
But i know that pain isn't real..you just make it up with your mind
Keep it up
Laura