This is a really powerful poem in it's own simple way, I think. There are a lot of emotions and pain expressed in it, and it flowed pretty good. A well written poem again David. Well done. =]

Tammie

Hey dear....you are an amazing writing!! u really need to keep writing! i think one day im gonna put a book together of all this poetry stuff and i want you to be in it!!! :) big hugs! if you need to talk email me or msg me!!! lylab
amanda

This is a great poem. It is really good considerng it was written in a short amount of time. It was really well written. 5/5

Kalee

In reading this I can feel the emotion ,such a powerful write ,great work ,well done.

Amazing work. Keep writing. I would love to read more.

Hey david if you wanna talk just message me.

Wow David. It's simply heart wrenching. It describes everything so perfectly.. I am tearing up reading it. The emotion and flow are wonderful. I simply can't describe how much this poem speaks to me. It deserves more than a 5/5. Just wow... The heartbreak in this poem is crying out to be loved and wanted and touched. It's all about loving someone and not getting loved back. I know how that feels, and I couldn't have described it better if I tried.

Much Love,
.:Danielle:.

Every9one can relate to this, this hurting feeling.... wow. you described it perfectly, it flowed so smooth...and so sad. but beautiful
5/5
your friend
gabriella ;p

You know, starting off on reading this I really didn't think I was going to like it, but at the end you had really pulled me in. The emotion and imagery expressed in this piece were wonderful and you kept the flow intact.

One thing though, in the line..
"Cause why fight the struggle"
"Cause" should have a ' in front of it as a shortened version of because. The way you have it now is like "He was the cause of the accident."

Anyways, great job, I liked this.
5.5
=]

Woah that poem blew me away. Very very nicely written David, it was my pleasure to read such a great write such as this. Kepp it up! 5/5

Excellent poem, I really enjoyed, keep up the fantastic work. Check out some of my poems when you have the time.

Best Wishes
Wallace

Wow, as everyone else said, this was pretty deep. A broken heart is just so hard to come back from. I know but I kept telling myself that everything happens for a reason and things have to get better.
And they did.

Oh Gosh poor David!
I hope your doing better now.
I love this poem. I suggest you change
NOTHING!!
It was excellent David
One of your best poems yet
Remember I'll love you always and forever
xoxo
Your slave
Kaila

David
Very intense piece. The sadness and pain can be felt in your words. Great job!

Go deeper and deeper
To my heartless core
No point, no reason
To face life anymore

Very heart felt.
Take Care Cindy

Wow!
really good poem!
:]]

If we do not feel pain at least once how can we enjoy love at all the more pain in the past the stronger we love the right one

Soo lovely poem u have written there with alots of feelings :)

Powerful, heart wrenching, amazingly well done.the emtion deeply rooted, perhaps a little twisted for the dark side, but the flow is flawless, and it is well penned. Again your words have enlightend my soul. keep writting, and I will keep reading.

I like your poems too. Keep it up! :) thanks for the comment. ;) you take care boy. ;)

Wow. this poem has good rhyming and sends a good message. keep writing :]