Short and to the point. the word choice was good, the flow was great and the emtion was clear. You did a wonderful job on such a deep poem 5/5

I love how you used repetition in your poem, I think it was well done. The rhyming annoyed me a litte but I'm guessing you did it that way because you were trying to follow certain structure. So, good.

In my opinion sometimes it's better to just write a poem without rhyming, I've been trying it for a while, and I'm quite happy with that.

Anyway, keep writing. And let me know when you have a new poem. I will definitely want to read it.

XoXo
Gaby

Cool poem. Keep up the great work. 5/5

For such a short poem, you have a lot of power and effectivness in it. The repitition worked well and was not over done. Good job. :)

Wow you managed to say so much with so little in this poem. As opposed to the last one I really liked the ending of this however it was very sad. I hope that this is just a poem and that you and your mother aren't competing in weight, because thats very unhealthy. Take care and nice write.

That was short but there is repitition. but it was overall good poem take care 4/5