This is different to other poems I have read.
It flowed well and the struture was good.
Keep it up 5/5

[Sarah]

Excellent work...loved the choice of words and your style of writing!!...Good pattern!...u give the reader's a good image thru this 1...
kp up de good work!
xxPoojaxx

Great imagery created with so few words, and an interesting structure makes this poem very original, it conveys a simple message very effectively. good write.

kim xx

I liked it, it is different from any other poem I have read. I also liked how you used a birds and worms to show how society and life sometimes work. 5/5

Nice one, very interesting, different from anything I've read.

~*Alex*~

Wow I really liked how you switched from the birds to the worm at every other stanza and I liked the comparison there. What I liked the most in this poem though was the three descriptive lines below it. The only critique I have is the first descriptive lines were really good but I think that the last one needs a bit more punch. Nice work though.

An unique poem.
Like it.
Great work