Wow i know what you mean, i loved the transition in the poem nice word choice , a little confusing end 4/5 maybe u can read one of mine.

Good job! 5/5 i didn't have 2 read it this time, already read it on paper! lol

Your title and basis of this poem is contradictory because the disease you describe is not self made...many people suffer from what you describe with your words. I like the poem, but I think you should expound upon it a little bit...maybe change the rhyming scheme..doesn't completely fit the topic of the poem. I think you might have more impact if only the first two and last two lines of the poem rhymed. I like the poem though, all of this is constructive criticism and should be taken as such. I will be reading lots more of your poems and look forward to your new works!

Interesting, good poem. I felt some of the rhyming was a little forced at times, and i did getting a little confused it was hard to follow too. But still a good poem i would give it 4/5. well done

....I have that disease too hun!! not very fun is it, but i loved the poem, you put it down so well, great work with the rhyming too, the flow was flawless, hope you can cure it!!

xoxo Lucy

Great work again!...Good work!....the subject u chose to write about if powerful...Kp up the great job!5/5!
xxPoojaxx

Very well written, you did another excellent job, I don't have an critism to offer you thuis time, It seemed perfect to me. 5/5

Ah, eating disorders can make anyone feel like crap. i use to think everyone that had one was stupid too til it happened to me. now i feel sorry for everyone that has ever went through it :(
5/5.

Interesting job. I liked the way that you chose to lay this peice out. I think that, it wouldn't have worked any other way because its like one big speech kind of thing. The only critique that I have is that I think it needs a period on the very last line. Other than that nice work.