I really liked it, the flow was great and your ryhming wasnt forced at all, and i really likes the concept, good job, 5/5

Nice work, i slightly disagree with Steph i think it was a lil forced at times but still nice outcome, ending was great loved it. Enjoyed it and very interested in reading more of your work keep it up. : )

Amazing one:) I can tell you are improving. Like the words and your endings are always very touching. Keep up the great work :)

WOW I can't believe you're only 12 years old! you have real talent! keep it up! well done! another 5/5! I enjoyed this poem! :)

Your talented for 12 years old =D imagine what you poetrys gonna be like when ur older. Well done with this nicely written dark poem emotional and great to read. Good work~mel

Your sad poems are beautiful, great work! and thanks for the comments! i really needed some, i felt ignored by people! 5/5!

Your sad poems are beautiful, great work! and thanks for the comments! i really needed some, i felt ignored by people! 5/5!

Very well done! The flow was
absolutly flawless and the poem
didn't have a mistake as far as I
can see. God Bless 5/5
<3tay(^_^)

You're only 12? You have a very good vocabulary for a 12 year old. Good start, keep writing and trying to improve your rhymes. Keep writing!

Wow. Thats a truly great poem. You penned it so well; the flow, the wording, everything about it is great!

Simple yet effective. powerful lines, perfect flow, great wording, deep emtions. I liked this one a lot. I have no construtive crtisim to offer for in my eyes this is perfect. 5/5

Your word choice was simple but yet everything was portrayed nicely. The emotions seemed strong, and i loved the word crystallized i don't see that too much in any poems. Well done~mel

This was really good. I loved the simple structure and yet it still held so much meaning. The flow was good, the rhymes worked, and the emotion clear. Nicley done. 5/5

Even though the rhymes seemed a little forced at some times, this was wonderful to read. you're a very talented writer, and only 12 years old! that's amazing! but good job with this... 5/5

Excellent..

"This misery I felt before
does not compare
These crystallized tears
are becoming so bare"

I liked this part and can relate to the whole poem. nicely done.. :)

Really osm write!!! keep it up

This was amazing!!How well you have written this!!I can realte to it so well.
Good job in this piece!!
Best wishes
And take care.

To only be 12 this poem is great. There were certain parts that did seem to be a little be forced. It was a great poem though and the imagrey was amazing. Loved it. 5/5
*Brittney

Your poem gave me goosebumps! short but to the point, very nice. good job <3

Nice to see how enchanting this piece is. Your words, though they never conjured mental images, certainly generated certain heartrending feelings and emotions. I believed it is the major highlight of this poem. On the whole, this poem was written quite well and sound. Nicely done. 5/5 ~Debbie