Flowing River (acrostic)

by Brittany C   May 13, 2007


Flowing into the massive seas.
Light shining on your surface
(makes you sparkle like diamonds)
On ward you go to no end,
with your course forever set for you.
I hope enjoy your peaceful beauty.
Nature has keep you going this long but
growing towns could ruin you.
(If that day comes it will truly be sad)

Rain may cause you to flood your banks.
Indeed you may even grow some from it.
Vital you are to all living things, near and far,
Even though some may not realize that
(till it is way to late for you)
River flow quietly on your way
(hopefully forever adding to natures beauty)

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  • 12 years ago

    by ChrisT

    "Nature has keep you going this long but"
    good line but... it should be kept not keep just saying other than that a few other words should be changed like the "way to late" to "way too late" kinda a proof read if you will... the poem overall is outstanding and beautiful its inspiring and you are an amazing poet

  • 12 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Good job with the acrostic and I like the message within this write. Its a pity how
    people are ruining mother nature's nartual beauty..

  • 16 years ago

    by PygmyPuff

    Very nice topic, I love how its a metaphore within itself.

    I don't like how the last line is out of place, with or without the parenthesis, it is out of place. Also the structure is a bit mucky, with commas in random places that distrupt the flow.

    {4/5}

    [PygmyPuff]

  • 16 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    Change "way to late" to "way too late"
    I like the metaphor you have incorporated into the poem.
    I like the "I hope enjoy your peaceful beauty." line. Very nice poem, and good use of parenthesis.

  • 16 years ago

    by firexdancer

    This is also really beautiful, i haven't read that many of your poems, but what i like about them is their inner strength and flow, and how calming they are. this one made me smile as well.
    5/5
    gabriella

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