This is a real sweet poem it like an inspiring tale. We unconciously direct ourselfs to a life of hatred wen a boy hurts us. They have no idea how weak it makes a girl bt they dont care anyway. This may help a few young girls make them ost out of the real men out there. If you changed one view you have succeeded hun
Hey, i really really loved your poem...it describes me...the girl that i am, insecure, a wreck, helpless and hopeless, waiting for that guy to sweep me off my feet, but never realized before that i dont make it easily, i push away, build up walls, hear things i want to hear n believe others lies, ive had a very hard past, sexually, physcially and emotionally abused..cheated on n hurt too many times to cant, i dont kno how to let go of my past, n let the right guy in, because im too scared of history repeatin its self but i dont wanna be all alone for the rest of my life, any advice?
It seems kind of forced to me.
Kind of overwhelming as well.
Maybe you could erase a few words, y'know?
The feeling you get when talking to someone new,
excited, but scared that they will hurt you...
Try to stay away from pronouns.
They usually get overused.
Other than that, it's okay I guess.
Nothing really caught my eye.
But I've definitely read some way worst
Poems than this.
All in all, 4/5?
Okay...I frikken adore this!
My favourite line is:
''You tell your friends you'll get over them, but you know you really wont...''
That line really stood out to me, I found it to be hardhitting, and filled with depth and feeling...
I particularly enjoyed the ending, it produces thought provoking questions and really makes the reader think.
You did a beautiful job with this.
This is so true.. I love this poem.. Thanks for making this poem! Everyone can relate to this beautiful poem well penned! I really don't like free verse style but this one is really good! well done! 5/5!