More (Tanka)

by BeautifulxMess   May 15, 2007


Rain pours down on me
As it hides the tears that fall.
I run from the pain
Because the hurt is too sore
And you were so much more.

Tanka is a poem that consist of 5 lines.
1st-5 syllables
2nd-7
3rd-5
4th-7
5th-7

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  • 16 years ago

    by Robert

    The flow was good the meter was great but you never really gave any why to the story, It was like your talking to someone with out letting the reader know the whole story. Plot121

  • 16 years ago

    by Miu

    Nice work. More imagery. Simple, short and sweet again. Flow wag good! Keep up the great work! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Sydney

    Put a picture in my mind. Im not used to a tanka but it was good XD. Nice work. I give it a 5

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