The flow was good the rthyming was good but again it just seemed like you were talking to some one and they had all the answers like why would you give them more who would you give it too these questions would need to be answered if you wish to write for the general public. Plot121
This seemed really forced to me.
Especially when you used the word "adore"
It seemed cliche.
Everyone else uses that word.
I expected something different.
All in all, it was okay.
Not great, though...