Comments : Dark Heart

  • 10 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    The darkness closes in,
    and hatred sets in,
    consuming the once red heart.
    Now black as night,
    from all the pain and hate.

    Beautiful wrk!!!.just lovely n dark..but nicely penned..the poem has it's own charm!.kp it up!5/5!
    xxPoojaxx

  • 10 years ago

    by Yuna

    Wow. This poem had lots of emotion hidden inside it. You made the poem flow, and you created something that really made sense. It reminds me of the heartless on Kingdom hearts! Great job!

  • 10 years ago

    by Robert

    The flow of your work is fine and your message is some what clear but I think your work could go alot more deeper and have more power if you would learn to explain to the reader the true cause for the emotions that drive your work just a thought Plot121

  • 10 years ago

    by Miu

    Beautiful just love it! Specially the heart discription and the thoughts in the poem. It keeps people reading:) Amazing poem! 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Melpomene

    This wass a beautifully dark piece of poetry, i loved the emotion and how you portrayed it throughout the entire piece, it really flowed beautifully. The word choice was simple yet powerful and the discription was amazing. Well done 5/5/~mel

  • 10 years ago

    by crystaljean88

    Wow, i can feel the hurt in this one. grat job 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Zeus

    It was deep and dark. And it painted a dreary image. It was very good. A job well done. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by The Pessimistic Peabody

    A great dark poem, good expression and the feeling throughout is palpable. I loved it. Simple words with great meaning 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Dark and sad, perfectly written. The flow was good, the emtion was strong, and the words descrpitive, I liked this one the best so far, 5/5 for you deserve nothing less.

  • 10 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I liked this poem alot i found it to be quite dark and sad. The ryhme shceme was interesting you pulled it off very well. THe first stanza was my fav. Capturing. Well done~mel

  • 10 years ago

    by Victoria Rainey

    I really like this poem but the first stanza.. it seems like it was wayyy overbaord with the rhyming.. but OTHER THAN THAT i LOVED THE FLOW it was really good.. there is nothing about it that I would want to change so keep up the good work!!

  • 10 years ago

    by Monica AKA Mika

    This poem is so deep...it really makes me think when i read it and i feel like i should read it 50 times in order to really understand it. My favorite line was: "But then one day
    so full of hot pain.
    The heart just gave out
    never to beat again" keep it up your a great writter..5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Fsams

    Excellent, even the view of the poem is so catching. Great 5/5 from me:-)

  • 10 years ago

    by KeyxMashingxParody

    Well, I gave it a 5/5 for it fits the category you put this peice in, but the emotion was too dull for me. Other than that the flow and stanzas were great.

  • 10 years ago

    by RetroRavey

    Great poem. 5/5
    Ravyn

  • 10 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Now welcoming the pain
    and so full of unforgotten pain.
    [[Don't use the same word within two stanzas of each other. It's distracting.]]

    However.
    I really liked the idea of this poem and I enjoyed the ending.
    I'm sorry, I'm not sure what else to say.
    But. Yeah.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

  • Chilling...i want to read more by you!

  • 6 years ago

    by Blackstar

    Like to read your poems!
    specialy those with much emotion in it.
    keep on writing
    5/5

    -blackstar