Comments : Hello, Little Girl

  • 10 years ago

    by just me

    Very frightening but very well written and sumthing else.........idk......very disturbing.....but it is a great poem.
    <3
    L.C

  • 10 years ago

    by Roses and lilys

    Great poem. Yah I think title is a good fite. I really liked this one. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Quietly Crushed

    This isnt offensive but you might wanna change the title to, Im the old lover

  • 10 years ago

    by Vanessa

    The title you chose is perfect. the story in this poem was a little chilling quite unnerving really, but the word choice is strong, and the emtion was deep. I think this is one of the best poems I have ever read by yu, the words aren't showoffish, and the meaning is simple, easier to understand. You have outdone yourself this time. I really loved this one. great job 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by isabel

    I think the title fits in...it doesn't explain too much about the poem, so the reader can get curious...
    this poem frightened me...
    it's wonderful...but the idea of...
    well, anyway, the poem is really well written...
    5/5
    keep going
    *isabel*

  • 10 years ago

    by Delie

    It's a great poem, and yeah i think the title fits...
    i like how it's kinda "disguised" and you first talk about the man and his lover then we figure out the lover is his daughter...ect
    well done :D

  • 10 years ago

    by Monica AKA Mika

    OMG i love this poem, not because it is scary but because it is true, i had a freind who had a 40 year old stalker and they caught him but still, its scary! Great Job!

  • 10 years ago

    by Melpomene

    The title i found to be perfect, It was quite intertesting, with a chilling tale lol i enjoyed this poem alot simply because the emotion from your word choice was so strong and powwerful. Really great though! loved this alot. Well done on a nicely penned poem~mel

  • 10 years ago

    by Marcus

    This poem was very interesting
    it was good though
    nice vocab
    nice flo
    interesting concept

  • 10 years ago

    by crystaljean88

    Very nice flow.. i like the poem... 4/5

  • 10 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    First of all....Perfect title.n the poem was good...though it did have a chilling effect..the choice of words which u used to portray the emotions was great!,,,,n the flow was perfect too.kp writing!
    xxPoojaxx

  • 10 years ago

    by Robert

    Hmmm if the girl was a stranger to the man I think the title would fit very well but you left that detail abit too hazy in the piece. I liked the message it was stark and to the point but the flow was abit off and your ideas were not really focused on one train of thoght good try though I gave it a 4 keep up the good work. Plot121

  • 10 years ago

    by skynerraw

    I think the title works very well, I liked the message, even though its a bit frightening, very interesting, with great emotion!

  • 10 years ago

    by BreeAnna

    This is really good... where did it come from??

  • 10 years ago

    by 111308

    Ohhh jeeze i'm jealous
    Your a great writer =]
    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    I like this poem and the way you wrote it, short/sweet and to the point. I think many fathers feel more then just fatherly love towards their daughters, sad but true. Excellent write 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Miu

    Unique theme again. It's so true how you bring out the male feelings in this poem. Makes it creepy. But very nicely written.
    Keep up the great work. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by ImNotPerfect20

    I like this poem.. a little creepy.father and daughter... but all in all its good.. Great Vocab and Nice Flow.. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Chrissie

    I love the topics of your latest poems. They are all about real topics, but topics not alot of people talk about. Once again, it was flawless and well written. Well done. Xx Chrissie 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Live WeLL

    Just as everyone else has already said.. it does give off a freaky stalker-ish vibe.. very interesting though.. i really enjoyed it.. you are a really good writer and I love the way you write about certain topics.. your style of writing is unique and your poems are very well written.. nice job.. keep it up =].. and thanks for the comments!