Carry That Weight

by Startle Me   May 20, 2007


Weight she carries on her chest,
Within her thighs and legs as well.
Unattractiveness means harder time,
Beauty and slenderness does excel.

Perfection is to be the unachievable,
Meaning to be the beauty and the geek.
Nevertheless, this lady will achieve it
Excellence this woman will seek.

Although, as hard as she might try,
Has not yet come close to the goal.
Something she seeks within herself,
This woman does not yet feel whole.

Incompetent feeling does not resign,
Above the surface this sensation lies.
False smiles does not work for her,
For this woman has no disguise.

She will carry this burden on her shoulder,
In her mind and in her thighs as well.
Large objects she would hide behind in,
Until realized beauty does not always excel.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Fsams

    Very beautifully written piece with an awsome flow, brimmed with meanings. Ur wordings r gr8. great means great 5/5 :D
    plx do read my 'Thank you'

    With love
    Fsams

  • 16 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Well done, a good poem, a few mistakes but you know that. keep it up
    xxxx

  • 16 years ago

    by StonedGooberz

    Hmmm... i like this poem but thats probaly cause i got freinds like that but hey its still a 5/5 for me

  • 16 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    I can relate to this. Maybe for this reason i was even more intrested in reading it. The title makes the reader ask loads of questions. What could you mean by tbis weight? Is it weight literally. Or is a weight of trouble s/he carries? It makes the reader want to know what the poems about and so they read on. You again extend this feeling of kinda confusedness in the first two lines. The firsat line we feel as thought its a weight as in a burden. Yet the secound line makes us think.. is the poem about eating disorders or soemthing ismilar? Then you go on to say things like "perfection" and stuff like that. This make me relate it back to anorexia. So this poem, well i can take numerous meaningd from it. And i really enjoyed this about it. the fact that you can take numerous meanings form it. Enjoyable read. Keep it up! xx

  • 16 years ago

    by Victoria Rainey

    This is really deep.. and of course you already kno this is a really good poem so deep and yet so powerful .. you're gonna be an amazing writer when you grow up.. i just know it because of your vocabulary and your of espressing your feelings.. .then again good job and keep up the work 5/5

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