Okay definitely on my favorites. I've never read anything like this before, and the title goes perfectly with it. The idea was truly great and very true, I just love poems and poets who bring out the things people usually ignore and you did that amazingly. A thought provoker in all meanings all the word. 5/5 of course the final stanza was perfect...

Wow this poem is deep.. very well written though and the meaning behind it is amazing and so true.. im also from nyc so i know what you mean.. great job.. keep it up and thanks for the comment =]

Definitely a favourite . It`s interesting . Really different . I like the whole flies idea .

See that guy with the nice car
He sells kids drugs for a living
But he lost his best friend to his boss
And himself he has never forgiven

I feel maybe it would sound better if the second line were instead "He sells drugs to kids for a living ." I`m not sure . There`s just too many s in a row without anything seperating them .
Besides that, this poem was great .
It really shows what people can`t see in life .
..__MiNDYY

I loved the first stanza
Until it hit this line
This is where the fun is at
It was kind of off, a little bit.
I don't know why.
It just didn't flow as well as the other lines
In that stanza.
The second stanza has some
Random stuff in there.
Also, I felt as though it was really forced.
She sells herself and gives them sex
That was kind of redundant.
All in all, it was kind of
Random, unconsistent, and forced.
I'm sorry, my dear.
I'm going to have to give you a 4.

Seems theres violence everywhere we go now, not just in the city or on the streets. I agree with the words in the poem though, the city is where you can find it all on one street corner. I can't lie though lol I love the City and I'll never leave, it'll only get worse before it gets better. Excellent write 5/5

Wow that was amazing the flow didn't seem off to me, some rhymes were as little simple, but hey the emtion was strong, and the the message was clear. Perfectly written I am adding this to my favs

This is beautiful...
So elegantly written, such a strong message conveyed through the written words.
Flow was flawless throughout, word choice was a joy to read and the imagery creates vivid pictures for the reader.
Beautiful work.

This was a wonderful poem depicting what goes on in the shadows of the city; the things that most people don't want to see. Keep up the good work. *5/5*

Alyson

Your poems are so great and full of real meaning. you are a talented person. keep it up

This was a poem showing the downsides to life 5/5 well done, keep writing and this is going in my favourites

~NinjaGirl~

Beautiful poem!
we pass by thousands of strangers each day but we never get to understand y they r how they r or wat their story is. we simply pass by.
loved it! 5/5!

This is a really wonderfuk poem, almost frighteningly realistic. It struck me with awe how true everything here seemed to be, painful even how terrible the city can be. But the city lights do draw a lot of people in, people dreaming of a better life.

I absolutely loved the three middle stanzas:

"See that girl on the corner
She sells herself and gives them sex
Shes dressed nice and seems so happy
But did you know thats shes depressed?"

^A prostitute, you immediately understand what it is you're talking about. They probably do make a lot of money but then you go on to say that she's depressed. Maybe embarassed that she has to resort so low. A very true diction.

"See that guy with the nice car
He sells drugs to kids for a living
But he lost his best friend to his boss
And himself he has never forgiven"

^Next you go on to talk about a guy. He may seem ordinary a nice car, just driving along the dark streets. But the money, came from selling drugs and ordinarily doing somehting like that is dark business. People die, and people disappear and that's how he lost his best friend.

"Now look at the homeless guy
He's just sitting there, by the wall
The drugs and city lights blinded him
He now has nothing, he lost it all"

^And then there's the underdog, someone everyone takes advantage of, and because of the city. Because of where he chose to be, where he tried to dream he lost everything. No money, no food and no home.

This was a painfully true piece, and you were able to tell us exactly how you felt about it. No sugar coated words, it was just the plain, straight up truth. Beautiful. 5/5

I'm from NJ and I know what you mean
I lived in NY for a few weeks
Stay out of the alleys, stay out of dark corners, stay away at night lol
True. 5/5