Comments : Coming Up For Air

  • 11 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    This peice was very short, but still oh so sweet. It is really catchy and portrays alot of emotion..
    I didn't really get the title but perhaps this will just be the start of a master piece, and later on you will be incorporating the title.

    Still well done,
    Elainex

  • 11 years ago

    by kasia nicole

    That was good i liked hwo you rymed there

  • 11 years ago

    by MyMuse

    This was so short but so lovly, it brought tears to my eyes, love is like the water, itll never slow down, and dry out. Well done on this one! I love it all so much, its very dear to my heart<3

    With Care,
    *~x~*CourtneyxHolland*~x~*

  • 10 years ago

    by AnnieBananie

    I love this. :]

  • 10 years ago

    by Kate Hicks

    I love this. Have you tried writing Haiku's? I think you would be realy good at them. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Ashley

    I love this!!

  • 10 years ago

    by Sharr

    Short And Simple
    i Like It .

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenn

    Short and simple, but nice! And I love that you personify "love" and "water" by capitalizing them. I do similar things in a lot of my poetry. By capitalizing "lives" and not "dies" I'm thinking that power of the water living is much greater than that of the water dying. Which is cool. That's just what I got out of it. 5/5