...And, ah!
Perhaps the roseate roses
deepen in cheeks of cherry
as thy smile remains
radiant as thine soul.
[[If you take my breath away again, girl, I'm going to have to sue and make /you/ pay the doctor bills!]]

What a lovely [scoundrel] you are, darling!
...Indeed, indeed; in morbid deeds.
[[That's it! I'm sueing!]]
[[But seriously, I love this line beacause of the {scoundrel} part; it makes it Perfect.]]

You, my dear, are an absolute amazing writer. If you want to read my poetry and give me tips, I'd be honoured. I'd love to write like this.
Now. Again, you stole my breath and threw it out the window carelessly. Shame on you. This was such a gorgeous poem. You are a brilliant writer.

+Favorites.
And maybe contest when I get the chance.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

Holy shit, where in the world did u come from... that kinda blew me away haha wow ima start readin ur poems more..

Wow, a beautiful piece, truly exquisite imagery. i love it because it's different 5/5
mezmeryz x

Very nice. I enjoyed the old diction. I tend to stick to contemporary language so this was refreshing for me. I did enjoy the alliteration particularly on the last three lines of the third stanza.
The first line of the ending couplet left me unsure. Maybe scoundrel would still be as powerful, if not more so without the punctuation, and darling isn't completely needed there I feel.
Lovely write.

Breathtaking free-style poem. A very gentle and calming read. There's nothing more I can say. Wonderful job