I'm lying on this muddy ground
As the rain slides off me
I'm looking up and soaking in
This grayness that surrounds me

I would usually say something
About how two me's not going together
But then you MADE it work for some reason.

Your usage of words are very simple.
Very easy to understand.
But your whole topic just seemed like
I've read this before, y'know?
I don't want to use "Cliche" again.
Because I've used that constantly today.
And I know that some people are getting
Irritated by it. Lol.
All in all: 4/5

I really liked this poem although I found the in first stanza you rhymed the word "me" with "me" and i found that kind of made the flow go off. The topic seemed a little too simple but i found you pulled it off very well. Your word choice simple but effective the flow good and the ryhme not so bad apart from the first stanza. A good effort on this poem well done~mel

Overall I liked the poem and it was written pretty well. I didn't really like how you rhymed me with me in the first stanza atfirst, but I reread it and I changed my mind the second time around lol nice job 5/5

Cause what ever those words were
They're killing me inside
And I were to die today
I think I should to know why

i loved these lines...very beautiful..n touching..deep!
simple yet powerful words...it added to the beauty n intensity of hepoem...great wrk!
5/5!
xxPoojaxx

Great job.. i love the last stanza

Like dry leaves floating on a pond
My memories are cracked and dead
I hear you voice but not a word
Of all those things you said

That is my favourite stanza . To cover the typical things : Good flow, good rhyme scheme . In the first stanza, I would normally take note that you used "Me" for both rhymes, but I must say -- iT WORKS . Now to the other things - Wow . (: I could totally relate to that . Part of this seemed done before, like I`ve heard it so many times, BUT you did a really good job with it (:

And I were to die today

I think you meant "And if I were to die today ."
Just taking note :]
..__MiNDYY

I'm lying on this muddy ground
As the rain slides off me
I'm looking up and soaking in
This grayness that surrounds me

Like dry leaves floating on a pond
My memories are cracked and dead
I hear you voice but not a word
Of all those things you said

These staza hold so much power to me, they spoke more than just mere words. emtions strong and deep. the word choice was brillant, and the flow was flawless. perfectly penned, you did another wonderful job.

Great poem hun.. i love it

I like this one a lot just one complaing

"I think I should to know why"

either its supposed to be 'i think i should get to know why'. or 'i think i should know why'

Okay i thought this was really good..but im a little confused...if you don't know what the words he said how is it killing you? lol idk im stupid & where you had "I hear you voice but not a word" you put you instead of your

This was a very gripping poem the flow was good the torment you shown through out the piece was great and how you made your envirorment melt with the dominate enpending doom was done quite well Great work Plot121

Your third stanza and your very last line were my favorite things about this poem! The whole piece had this Sleepy Hollow feel (not that I was a fan of the movie or story) but it gave off that creepy eerie feeling and I liked that! It was cool!
Charisma*

Wow this is fantastic, its perfect dear, enjoyable and outstanding. I loved all the lines in this piece.

They're killing me inside,
And if I were to die today,
I think I should know why.

Wow these lines are the most catching for me. Tc