Comments : Fairytale love

  • 16 years ago

    by Gem

    "You said it would be you and me,
    No matter what anyone tried to say,
    At least for now, I'll have to disagree,
    I'm not fond of these games you play."

    It's a great poem, it really shows how love can turn sour yet for the best (if that makes sense)
    Excellent rhythm
    5/5
    *Gem*

  • 16 years ago

    by Chrissie

    I loved this poem!! The flow was one of the best ive ever seen and words were so beautiful. The last stanza was magnificent. Awesome writing, keep it up. 5/5 Xx Chrissie

  • 16 years ago

    by Liz

    That was so good.
    I loved it. Excellent work!5/5
    ~Liz

  • 16 years ago

    by hani

    Very nice and beautiful , you realy a god gifts good work 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Live WeLL

    Nice nice nice.. you really have an awesome way of ending your poems.. i love the way you end them.. one again amazing write and of course something that a ot of people can relate to.. keep it uPp =]

  • 16 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    This poem flowed really well. It's very saddening when a relationship doesn't work out, yet it was very nice to see that your poem had a positive ending.

    "I once felt the sorrow when we were apart,
    Now being without you makes me complete. "

    ^^ Very nice indeed.

  • 16 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    *Claps*
    Wow!!...great work!
    this peice flowed like water...lol...n perfect ending!...just great!...
    Kp wriiting!
    5/5!..easy=)
    xxPoojaxx

  • 16 years ago

    by Allison

    The ending was a little different then I expected when I started reading. This was a wonderful poem and I really like it (though this isn't the genre I'm use to reading). Keep up the good work. *5/5*

    Alyson

  • 16 years ago

    by stefanie

    I can relate to the beginning of this one.... its a great poem. it flows nicely. its well written. i was reading some of your other poems and you are good with a pencil haha... great job. and thank you for the comment. ill will use that title. it does fit it. thank you

  • 16 years ago

    by BreeAnna

    I really liked the last stanze last line. that was really good and it made me take a second look. I have felt that way so many times, but reading it from someone else just made it sink more in. great job.
    keep it up.
    Bree

  • 16 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    The twist in this poem was great. i love it all. i'm going to add it to my favorites after i rate you. (5/5)

    the only thing it alter is "lonely town" idk, try to come up with something more fairytale related. Like make an allusion with it. that would add something extra to the poem.

    =]

  • 16 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    I gave up my entire world for you,
    While you promised to do the same,
    It was fairytale love, we tried to pursue,
    Now your saying someone else's name.
    `Love . It . That last line in the stanza was really powerful to me . This is a cliche topic, but you totally rocked it [:

    I once felt the sorrow when we were apart,
    Now being without you makes me complete.
    `You`ve put into words what I wanted to say for so long now and didn`t figure out how to say until this year . Beautiful way to end it .

    I really liked it . It really shows how love may end, but it`s for the best and you`ll always be able to get over it .
    ..__MiNDYY

  • 16 years ago

    by Vanessa

    I agree a cliche subject, but this poem is not cliche, it is perfect. the twist at the end was amazing, and diffrent, and diffrent is always good. The last stanza is powerfully full of deep emtion, the flow of the entire poem is wonderfully well plotted, and the word choice was excellent. I really liked this, It keept attention all the way though it.

  • 16 years ago

    by Alex

    Really pretty. Sorry I don't have a long comment like these other people haha, but I thought it was really nice.

    5/5

    ~*Alex*~

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    Oh my gosh
    I'm so sorry
    this poem is so good
    it says what we all want to say sometimes
    but it doesn't come out right
    you showed us all how to write about this sore subject
    wonderful job

  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    For[[,]] I'd have surely turned around.
    Now[[,]] being without you makes me complete.
    ^ commas

    Other than that you did a wonderful job.
    Loved it, once again great emotion. easily related to.
    keep it up

  • 16 years ago

    by Bloomed Rose

    That was really good. nice job. the rhyming was beautiful, and your wording flowed with the poem, nice job.

  • 16 years ago

    by moonlil

    Great poem.

  • 16 years ago

    by GemmaR

    I agree. Your last stanza was the best- felt that too many times!

  • 16 years ago

    by Monica AKA Mika

    This is SOOOOOOOO Good i love it and i can totally relate to every word! My favorite part is "You talk your way back into my heart,
    Expecting acceptance for all your deceit,
    I once felt the sorrow when we were apart,
    Now being without you makes me complete." This is just such a good line i cant believe you could put all my feelings in such a beautiful way!