Comments : Concrete Angel

  • 16 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    Wow. i saw a couple errors here adn there, but i put that aside because the message matters most. wonderful job.

    have you ever heard of the song concrete angel? it used to be one of my favorite songs in elementary school.

  • 16 years ago

    by Hillstar123

    I am completely convinced to comment every sinlge poem that you write. I can't imagine how you write so well.

  • 16 years ago

    by Janette Bradley

    A beautifully sad poem. Struck a chord with me, as I'm expecting my first baby in 7 weeks. I like the way you wrote it, will check out your other stuff.

  • 16 years ago

    by FallenAngel44

    Wow. That was wicked powerful!
    Good job! Where did you read the article?
    Keep it up.

    ~Tara

  • 16 years ago

    by Laurenf7

    Wow! 5/5 that is soo sad.

  • 16 years ago

    by Natasha

    My first r/r/c to you as contest winner!

    Reading this poem, made me see how talented you are at bringing a message across that papers (here at least) often lack.

    the most beautiful part of the poem for me was the following:

    A sweet child of nearly one,
    born early from what his parents had done.
    Doctors are baffled, not much to do
    he is suffering from death thats overdue.

    I don't think other words could have made a bigger inpact!
    I am very happy I got the chance to read this piece.

    ~*Natasha*~

  • 16 years ago

    by amandalynn

    It's really sad how people can be cruel and do drugs and stuff..especially when they have a baby coming on the way..really good poem though. 5/5

    amanda.

  • 16 years ago

    by i LoVe HiM

    Omg.. this is so sad.. but its wonderful.. wats even more sad than the poem is that it rlly happened.. well haven heard from you in a while.. plz PM me...
    -*skyler*-

  • 16 years ago

    by Polaroid

    Wow this was really great, keep it up,
    i've read a couple of your poems now, and they are fantastical, so i was wondering if you could comment and vote on sum of my poems, it would be greatly appreciated.
    I'm new to writing poetry so i need some feedback, thanks,
    Polaroid
    p.s GREAT JOB

  • 16 years ago

    by crazyboutlife

    Sad... but very well written i really liked it..

  • 16 years ago

    by Jack Rabbit

    Sad. True. Fantastic. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Alexandra Jade Brewer

    Wow, Phenominal poem. This is really sad, and very well done. It flows so smoothly and there is so much emotion. Keep up the good work
    5/5
    *gone to read more*

  • 16 years ago

    by Lisa

    Wow that was so beautiful reminded me of the song by Martina McBride called concrete angel,great work
    got me tearing there.
    Keep it up
    Lisa

  • 16 years ago

    by Amber Smith

    I love ur poem there a lot of meaning to it sad but and true!

  • 15 years ago

    by TwistedAngel xx

    WOW first of all I love how some of your poems are based on true stories and things you have read in newspapers.

    I ought to try that sometime and see what I can come up with. very brilliant idea by the way.

    "Doctors are baffled, not much to do
    he is suffering from death thats overdue."

    ^^^
    That line was so sad and heartbreaking, so powerful.

    I like how your poem follows the child as the years go by. Beautiful use of insight.

    WOW major ending, really brought the piece home. I hope everybody learns from it as well.

    You're doing a great job with your poems.
    well done
    ^_^