The Excuses Were For You

by Sandra D   May 28, 2007


You're the reason
I'm doing what I am,
Standing on the edge
With that gun by my side.
I'm sorry I'm such a failure
Through everything I do and say.
But you drove me to this,
Without even doing anything.
That's just it though,
It's everything you never did.
Whatever I did, you never loved me,
No matter how much I cared for you.
Night after night
You'd hit me, apologize,
and hit me again.
Then my world would go black.
I'd always wake up the next morning,
And prepare myself for the questions.
Then, again, I'd go to school,
And make up more excuses
Like the ones last time,
Just the day before.
I try to protect you,
And now I'm just sick and tired of it.
So with this hand
I'll take that gun,
Get over my fears, and pull the trigger.
Again, I'll wait for my world to go black,
And I'm looking forward to no more excuses tomorrow.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Spirit

    Not your best poem but still very strong, keep up the good word:~)Sam

  • 16 years ago

    by Pete

    This is always a tough subject for people to read/write about. I think you did a stand up job writing about such a touchy subject.
    The content and word choice defy your years.

    I would only recommend that this be broken into stanza's. I always see a block of text rather daunting to read, i think breaking it up into stanza's would make it a little easier on the eye.

    Hard topic,
    Nice flow.
    Good work.
    [5/5]
    ~Pete.

  • 16 years ago

    by Xx KaYleY 2008 BaYbeE xX

    Hi again....VERY powerful words for your age if you don't mind me saying and i noticed that you mentioned a GUN...and i was shocked.
    The amount of people that can get hold ov guns in America is unbelieveable and it's really hard over here..id say it's a good thing because the amount ov times iv tried to kill myself, i would have succeded with a gun and at the minute i'm feeling a bit better than i was.
    Anywayz same again take care chik
    XxX XxX

  • 16 years ago

    by Fsams

    Great piece indeed. Well worded with a good word choice and flowing well. I liked the grief depicted in this piece. Lovely! One thing I would suggest you is structure the poem :)

    5/5 all the way
    Tc
    Fsams

  • 16 years ago

    by nikki

    Oh my god, it was so sad, the way you described this with your words, created such a strong picture in my mind. i loved it. but it was sad. *tears*
    5/5

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