Romance{{acrostic}}

by .K.i.T.t.Y.   May 30, 2007


Rain gently sparkles as it falls from the sky,
Overlapping harmony with its gentle sigh;
My worries begin to fade as I'm in your arms,
All is so serene there is no reason for alarms;
Nothing can interrupt a moment so fantasizing,
Comfort that resides in you is tantalizing;
Every beat of my heart flutters with joy.

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Check her out. She has great poems, and she kindly helped me fix the flow of the -ing ending lines. =]

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  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I love this.
    Very beautiful and touching, and such beautiful imagery portrayed throughout.
    Alot of the time acrostics come across as unfinished because people can't find the right words, but this was definietly worth the read...beautiful work with this.

  • 16 years ago

    by Startle Me

    Your beginning?
    Wonderful, dear.
    It's very... discriptive and very, very clear.
    Also, I loved the flow of where you're going.

    All is [[so]] serene there [[is]] no reason for alarms;
    I don't like the word so.
    I think it's childish.
    Just what a regular teenager would say.
    Also, your is is supposed to be "are"
    Just verb conscion is all.

    Your ending?
    I love it.
    It's.. musical almost.
    Eck.
    What am I saying.
    Lol.
    But still.
    Your flow was wonderful.
    Your grammar was a bit off at some points,
    But it was okay.
    All in all.
    Wonderful write, dear.
    5/5?

  • 16 years ago

    by Live WeLL

    Awww this was really sweet.. and usually with acrostics some rhymes seem forced but this was very nicely written and everything flowed very well.. excellent job. and thanks for the comment =]

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Very nice poem. I loved the flow and the word choice and the image. I gave it 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    Aww very cute
    i loved it
    great use of words
    wonderful job