I really like this poem because it isn't really detailed...

I realy loved this poem nicely panned . you have talanet. keep it up. take care 5/5

OMG this is like a nightmare, i cant belive how good that was tho...i cant even imagine if what i would do if that were to ever happen to me! I love this poem even thou i almost cried..i love the way you paint a picture with your poems...keep it up..5/5

Wow, this is really good, you've got the details linked directly to pull on the heart strings. great job.

Powerful..

and sad :[

you are very talented

Aw... Thats so sad... ='( 5/5 I love this poem

Very sad poem - but I was waiting til the end to find out what it was he died from? Hours before he was alive and well and then he was gone with all that blood around?? Now Im curious!! :)

Good poem. Only suggestion is the last line seems too full of sylables (I would suggest instead of "We never even shared one last kiss" maybe something like "Gone, without one last kiss" as its less of a mouthful at the end).

Very impacting piece.

Fantastic!!!

Mo
xx

This poem kept me waiting until the very last sentence. i was desperate to find out what would happen next.
you kept the reader interested and left them wanting to find out more
great job
5/5

I thought that was really good, it actually made me teary eyed. Totally a 5/5, it was beautiful, well written and in a way disturbing, just really great.

"Laying my head upon your chest
Your heartbeat I no longer hear
Sobs erupt like acid rain
Overcome with pain and fear"

That was my favorite part, it was so good.

~*Alex*~

I like a lot this poem because you managed to describe the same feelings I had in certain moments of my life.Congratulatios,you're a great poet.Keep on the good work.Take care of you.Best regards,Michelle XxX 5/5

Hello my name is alyson
and i think that you are a very good writer and your words from this poem relate to one of my exboyfriend whom i loved very dearly.......thanx for writeing that poem

I love this poem....you are really a great poet

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Exciting, interesting and nicely penned...

Nazeer

Your poems are really sad, they make me cry

That is beautifuly sad 5/5