When I'm Not With You

by Brittany C   May 30, 2007


Time creeps by in slow motion.
When you're not within my arms.
My nights seem so very long
and everything appears so plain.

I spend my time
thinking of you;
it doesn't help
time go by faster.

Still it's just too hard
not to think of you.
When my body craves
your hands gentle touch.

Loneliness is all I seem to know when
we don't see each other for days.
My heart aches for you so painfully
seeming to harden, about to crack.

Cold nights full of longing
because I can't have you,
lying next to me in bed.
To keep my safe and warm.

I find myself dreaming of you
through lonely days and nights
of you holding me close.
Saying everything is all right

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  • 16 years ago

    by nikki

    It was awesome. i loved this one to, not sure if i like the whole poems that don't rhyme thing, but it was great

  • 16 years ago

    by RetroRavey

    I loved it! 5/5 definitely!

    Ravyn

  • 16 years ago

    by Vanessa

    The flow was a little off, try reading it outloud
    I like the fact that this didn't rhyme, but still a little cilche although I would like to stangle the person who came up with that word. Anyways the word choice was good, but I know that you could have stepped up the vocab a bit, and added more power by doing so, other than that really good 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    Isn't it funny how when your apart from the one you love the minutes seem like hours, but when your with them the hours seem like minutes. Fantastic love poem filled with emotion and love, great work 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    Good job.
    Maybe work on the syllable count, messes up the flow a bit.
    Large, big, large, small, large doesn't always work too well with stanzas. Just in some poems.

    Good job though; loved the wording.
    Keep it up.

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