GOOD POEM.... KEEP THE GOOD WORK UP!
~HAZEL~

I am sorry if this sounds to harsh but honestly there is plenty of room for improvement. there wasn't really any flow and there was no rhyme scheme. better punctuation can help with the flow..using commas etc.. Overall I give it a four..
Tyanna

It was a really good poem.. I really loved the flow.. but there was a few spelling errors.. something simple though.. srry I wish I could give you more but.. its already good enough as it is.. good job and keep up the good work of yours.. I already voted that poem long time ago..

I agree with this poem, cause i can relate to it. it is so hard to be far from someone you really care about, ask me how it feel

good job

I liked the ending, but I feel that you need to edit . The feelings in this poem are there, and they`re nice, it`s just the poem it`self needs some help . Definitely not one of the best I`ve read from you .

My heartaches for you so painfully
seeming harden, about to crack.
`My heart aches for you so painfully .
And did you mean "Seeming to harden" or "Seeming hardened" ?

The flow was really rocky after the first stanza . First I was like, wow . But then it just ... collapsed .
Work on it .
I know you`re a good writer .
..__MiNDYY

This poem sorta rushed itself along. it wasnt a soft slow rde as it could be. however i liked it. and it reminded me of a book i just finished today. its called new moon by stephenie meyer. the book before it though is twilight.

well nice job. and thank you for the comment.

I usually dont like poems that dont rhyme because they just seem awkward to me but this one wasnt so bad.. i kinda liked it.. and people can definitely relate to this because this is a feeling everyone experiences when they are away from the one that they are with.. nice job and thanks for the comment =]

Great poem. I really liked it.. and i can relate to what your writing about.. Great job. 5/5

I really like this poem, i used to be able to relate, when my ex broke up with me, but then i met my boyfriend and now im not missin him(as much) anymore...girl i am tellin you... everything happens for a reason and you will find someone new...

Beautiful poem...i can really really relate to this one...B'coz it really is bad being away from someone you love...Very well penned...though a few errors did effect the poem's beauty...the way u've penned it is good!
Kp writing!
xxPoojaxx

I loved it. I can relate to this poem on different levels. I loved the strong flow of emotions.
5/5

<UnToLd TrUtH>

Time creeps by in slow motion
When you're not in my arms.=
Time creeps by in slow motion
When you're not within my arms.

and everything appears plain. = and everything appears so plain.

My heartaches = My heart aches

my bed. = bed (emit the "my")

through days and nights = Through Lonely days and nights

Telling me everything's ok. = Saying, "Everything's Alright."

Well written, cute poem. I enjoyed your words, but found your on and off rhyme to be particularly disturbing with the actual flow.

I liked your meaning, although it seems that (I make the same mistake too) the way you've gone about describing your emotion's is a failed attempt at not being cliche.

Despite all that, you have a well written poem on your hands =]
Keep up the good work.
Onto your next poem.

5/5
~Stephen White

Hmm...
I never realized that I was prejudice against poems that didn't rhyme.
I guess this proves that I am, though.

Time creeps by in slow motion[,/;]
When you're not within my arms.

The first one's not a complete sentence.
Add the two together and they make a perfectly good one, though :]

time [[goes]] by faster
It's goes, babes.

Still[[,]] it's just too hard
not to think of you.
When my body craves
your hand[[']]s gentle touch.

Loneliness is all I seem to know
when we don't see each other for days.

That line seems kind of awkward.
Maybe you could change it into
Lonely days are all I know
When we don't see each other

My heart aches for you so painfully
seeming to harden, about to crack.
Very discriptive, this line.

The rest was either perfect or just didn't really seem to catch my attention.
Remember, girly-o.
I'm prejudice against poems that didn't rhyme.
I don't know.
It was discriptive in a strange way.
But your grammar?
I don't know.
I guess I'm going to have to give you a 4.

Good job.
Maybe work on the syllable count, messes up the flow a bit.
Large, big, large, small, large doesn't always work too well with stanzas. Just in some poems.

Good job though; loved the wording.
Keep it up.

Isn't it funny how when your apart from the one you love the minutes seem like hours, but when your with them the hours seem like minutes. Fantastic love poem filled with emotion and love, great work 5/5

The flow was a little off, try reading it outloud
I like the fact that this didn't rhyme, but still a little cilche although I would like to stangle the person who came up with that word. Anyways the word choice was good, but I know that you could have stepped up the vocab a bit, and added more power by doing so, other than that really good 5/5

I loved it! 5/5 definitely!

Ravyn

It was awesome. i loved this one to, not sure if i like the whole poems that don't rhyme thing, but it was great