The Dent in My Heart

by claire   May 31, 2007


I have a dent in my heart
everytime it rains
that dent fills up
everytime a raindrop hits it
that dent gets a little deeper
but that dent will never flood
that rain can't reach my soul
and if you'll hold on
the sun'll be here soon

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  • Really good poem.

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by tears i cry

    It was cute but once again to short i didnt really have enough time to get into the flow 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Sabree

    I am sorry, but this is not one of my favorites. I can give you a 3.5/5 but no higher. Try and get a tad more creative with your words...poetry is all about showing your emotion and beauty...show it off! Try and strengthen your word choice and you will then be doing well. I think you have major potential.

    -Sabree

  • 16 years ago

    by claire

    Thanks guys - if anyone else votes - specifically under a 4 - could they leave a comment to tell me how i could improve?

  • 16 years ago

    by XxXTwistedxXxIllusionXxX

    I personally really like this... i think it has a relatible meaning behind the words. What you wrote is very true!

    -love whitney-