Beautifully penned! Flow was flawless, Excellent choice of words! and I love the title :D Fantastic work! 5/5! as always

This is really amazing I love the last line
thanks for sharing :)

As I toldd Taleee, this was AMAZING. I really loved it. The metaphors were unique and held so much meaning. The flow was good except for the last line was off a little bit. The emotion was very strong and I loved how you could not tell it was written by two different people. It seemed to just merge into one great writer. 5/5

Wow, so true, Its a great poem!! states reality in the cold hard facts! nice work both of you! but its not fair that I comment yours and not Nats lol, so I will comment hers now.

Excellent poem, bro! 5/5

This is beautiful, bro! 5/5

<Everything seems to be fading like the writings in the sand> I love that line! :)
You and Natalie did a stupendous job! :) This is very heartfelt and sad, but I loved it. :) 5/5!

Bri~