Comments : ABC when mum & me

  • 10 years ago

    by Dee

    Very well done.. um 2 things i could see that didnt quit blend "L for lame" is that ment to be lame? or the animal lamb, lamb ryms with jam also and the end it says " when mum & me" i think it would flow better if it was with mum & me...
    sorry to be picky.. but apart from that well done keep up the good work 4/5

  • 10 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Lol....Mohamed..it's..awww it's so cute..there is so much of "so-child like"something in the poem..and i loved the rhyme scheme too...Great job!
    Keep writing!
    5/5=)
    xxPoojaxx

  • 10 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    This is a great poem, pretty funny as well. The word Lamb has a b in it not an e, and I think you meant peck instead of pack. Either way excellent job 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Cyma Khan

    Thts really nice reminds me my kinder garden...

    God bless u

  • 10 years ago

    by Kelsea

    Haha. Its ccute! And the rhymes don't sound forced. It brings me back...you should write a children's book!

  • 10 years ago

    by Roses and lilys

    Cute poem. I'm sure alot of little kids would like it. It had a nice flow and was a simple and easy read. I gave it a 5/5.

  • 10 years ago

    by Tia

    LMA0!!!!
    S00 KY00T3 DA P03M!!!
    i L0V3 iT!!
    iTZ FUNNY TA!!
    HAHAHA 5/5
    K33P iT UP!
    ~TiiA~

  • 10 years ago

    by Roxanne

    I love your poem and how it rhymes and all that! It's very nice....

  • 10 years ago

    by Ike Dizzle

    This poem cool for kids lol. I like. 5/5
    -vino

  • 10 years ago

    by CompletelyIncomplete

    Really cute for kids. Simple and sweet. Kids wil love reading it. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Izi

    Ha ha ha ....lol,wat does lol mean, i use it but i don't know wat it means!!!

  • 10 years ago

    by Mezmeryz

    Aww that was soo cute..childish and funny together. really sweet! and educational of course! great work..keep it up! nuf luv xx

  • 10 years ago

    by Ayumi

    Too cute. ^^ (5/5)

  • 10 years ago

    by sabrina

    Omg that poem is great for children

  • 10 years ago

    by Debbie

    I don't find it particularly funny, whereas I believe that children poems like this one shouldn't be overlooked as if it's of no importance. In fact, this piece was charming and cute. Appealing to say the least.

    Nicely penned, as always, m'dear. =]
    all the best and take care,
    Debbie

  • 10 years ago

    by Birgit

    Nice =)!

  • 10 years ago

    by Vanessa

    A poem with such a child like essence is refreshing to see. this was cute and a little diffrent. Diffrent in my opion is good. The flow was good, some of the rhymes seemed a little off in some places, other than that the word chose was excellent. nicely done 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Robert

    This was a very cute poem I enjoyed it from A too Z a delightful read for anyone. Well done wording and a joy to lern great job Plot121

  • 10 years ago

    by danielle

    Hey good job!!!!
    ~danielle~

  • 10 years ago

    by nikki

    It was so cute, i loved it, it is the perfect way to learn the ABC's. nicely done. maybe i could teach my son the same way when he is older. lol. 5/5 my favorite was the letter X, what an easy way to remember it.