Comments : Tomorrow

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    Good job on this piece. Great message.

    life can lead us in many ways,some miserable times too.
    we can continue to pray,and feel our way in navigation.
    let them live their life happy,as tomorrow may never come.
    so speak those words today,before the time runs out.
    the darkness shall fade one day.,and with this dawn a new day.

    This was a really great stanza.
    Keep writing.
    Take care Cindy

  • 16 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Very nice message within this poem....nicely done....I espedially like the line:

    would take my looks with little pride,what i care about is inside.

    So true.....All the best, Debbie

  • 16 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Beautiful poem.. a very enjoyable read.. the flow was reallly nice except hard to find because of the rhyme scheme.. its different in every stanza and then the last stanza doesnt rhyme at all.. other than that this poem still a fantastic poem... the message was strong as well as the choice of words..

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Sara

    The message in this was amazing.. i loved it

    let them live their life happy,as tomorrow may never come.
    so speak those words today,before the time runs out.

    ^ i loved those lines, they really spoke to me. I loved this style of writing, and I think you're really good at writing this way. 5/5 from me, and thanks a lot for the comment, I really appreciate.

  • 16 years ago

    by valerie

    Hey that was a good poem now visit mine i have called yesterday it very interesting you'll love it