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by Tracy D Rollings
WOW this was an awesome poem, very unique and well worded, great job, loved it, keep up the good work, your friend Tracy dean 5/5
I noticed a few things in this one, first...
"But someone told me to never look back, directed me along this winding track."
^^ That line is kind of long, you could make it two lines, seperating it at the comma. Same with this one:
"I've been here before, not once but twenty times. And always one too less."
"Where neurones, well they're only neurones"
^^ "neurones" should be "neurons".
Other than that, the imagery was once again wonderful, it kind of skipped around a bit but I read it a few times and it made more sense every time lol.
Really good. I like this one nearly as much as the curfew at nine one.
Again, this would make an incredible song.
Wow, your writing amazes me every time. Great poem, with excellent choice of words, I love every line. You're so talented!
5/5 from me