Comments : Atachment to a lovable imagination

  • 10 years ago

    by Tracy D Rollings

    WOW this was an awesome poem, very unique and well worded, great job, loved it, keep up the good work, your friend Tracy dean 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    I noticed a few things in this one, first...

    "But someone told me to never look back, directed me along this winding track."

    ^^ That line is kind of long, you could make it two lines, seperating it at the comma. Same with this one:

    "I've been here before, not once but twenty times. And always one too less."

    Another thing,

    "Where neurones, well they're only neurones"

    ^^ "neurones" should be "neurons".

    Other than that, the imagery was once again wonderful, it kind of skipped around a bit but I read it a few times and it made more sense every time lol.

    5.5
    :]
    <3

  • 10 years ago

    by Narphangu

    Really good. I like this one nearly as much as the curfew at nine one.
    Again, this would make an incredible song.
    I'm jealous.

    Xp!
    --SP

  • 10 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow, your writing amazes me every time. Great poem, with excellent choice of words, I love every line. You're so talented!
    5/5 from me