Your first stanza?
Hillarious and a bit gross.
I could actually smell it, EWWW!
But still, your last line
On the first stanza?
It seemd really forced.
You should change it.
Even though it is quite funny.
It ruins the point of poetry if the flow is bad.
Some resist the power
I laugh an hour
Others guffaw longer
Many run in anger
Really forced in my eyes.
I have to admit.
It's quite funny.
But it's just didn't flow that well..
This was funny *rolls on the floor laughing
The subject alone isn't something widely done
*crying from laughing so hard the flow was good, the rhymes were great and thehumor clear. 5/5 *sides hurt frim laughing so much
HAHAHA - came in here to read another poem and couldn't resist opening this one! Hahaha - I am such a toilet humour person. I love talking about farts and I love hearing them even more! My husband can fart and I laugh for ages and then when I calm down, I think about it again and I laugh for even longer!!!