A really simple poem, it was nice to read. Haha I found it amusing that in the Indo part it says Lama haha. I'm lame. =] Anyway, there isn't much to critique really on this poem. But well done. =]

Tammie

That was interesting. i liked the Indo part good job. love
whitney

Very cool
its neat that you know a different language
i wish i knew two
or more i guess
very good
5/5
love always
kaila

Very creative, I learn Indonesian at school so it was easy to read...ish 5/5 Great choice of words and I went to Swan Hill in grade 2

Aku suka your Swan Hill. Very beautiful and descriptive. You owe 5/5 from me for this lovely piece.

In fact Aku suka kamu ;-)

I liked how it was in indonesian first and then you translated it 5/5 i learnt indonesian but I'm terrible at it... may i ask, are you from Swan Hill?

~NinjaGirl~

David
Awesome :) Very creative.
Take Care Cindy