I liked this poem alot, the meaning which you portrayed behind it was strong and powerful. Very different which is a good change to read. I liked your word choice and the first stanza was definitly my fav. Well done on writing such an capturing poem about an interesting topic. ~mel

Yeah awesome poem well done, i enjoyed it alot :) just want to point out some tiny tiny things that possably could make it flow jst a little better in one area.

[I believe strongly]
'needs to be made a little longer it breaks the flow' so maybe
"I believe with every piece of me"
that everyone has their reason for being here
and to add to my problem
i feel I am no more then what appears.

[[I want to make a change
to a person a family>>,<< a friend
maybe some day my feelings
will become a popular trend.]]
also breaking apart the family and friend thing.. but its just a suggestion.

Well done in all very well written and much enjoyed :) thanks for sharing.
5/5

Wow!..The poem was beautifully penned..and you've portrayed the meaning in depth in an absolutely great way..
The way you started the poem was catchy and the topic you chose to write was indeed interesting
Superb write..5/5

xxPoojaxx

Hiya! i thought that this was a lovely poem, its obvious how caring you are as a person wanting to reach out and touch peoples lives or make a different in our sometimes screwed up society. I think its wonderful that you wrote about this. i only have one criticism, some of the lines, especially these two that i picked out...

that the girl who was murdered will never be a wife

some people dont even have a dime

dont really fit into the stanza very well. you could try rephrasing them? i love the sentence in itself but perhaps they are a little too long for the stanza? i thought it just interupted the flow a little

but other than that girlie i thought this was fantastic

=]

Geo

I liked it. Cool poem. I think that you had chosen the right topic to write about. The flow was ok and the word choice was good. I gave it a 5/5.

This poem really hit the nail on the head and so many people out there are dying and never will have love or families. Great poem
Keep it up