Well, i think you had a nice flow in your poem. Don't ever doudt your work. I loved your poem and i certainly think it had a lot of great meaning to it.

This is a good poem. you dont need any changes in it. if you think its good than it is. and this story line is the reason most teens gets killed and stuff like that today. and im glad someone decided to write about it. well hopefully you might go check out some of my work.

***ayshley***

This poem has a good thought to it.. Not every poem has to rhyme. Although it would sound better.

Hmm. i dont have anything for the first 2 stanza's but maybe in the 3rd stanza last line maybe if you leave out "And" so it will read like this.

I was dreading what might happen.
You say I worry to much.
Please don't do this ,
now I'm left behind.

actucally that is all that i can find to fix.. This is not a bad poem.. I reread it a couple of times and it sounded better each time i read it. i give this a 5/5

Wow i should show this poem to my dad..lol...he could learn a few things from it...but i really liked it it rocks out loud!!

@: P

I think you could spice this up a bit by making a few more things rhyme and wxplain it a little more. Foe instance what does "e" mean?

Rado.. I like this, but it's not your best. But then again when we put alot of feeling's into things it tends not too be Sorta like my letter idea.We get the Idea's off our chest, then when we revise it, we can capture the emotion's in a more organized style.

It's still good, though.
Enjoyable to read.
Your friend,
Paula.