its the truth. and i am happy that you wrote it very well. you put here an excellent job and piece ofo work..
the uses ofwords was so great in your this poem. you have alot of talent. and May God Bless you.
Even today we're only safe to a certain degree,
Always beware of, White Hunter, Black Heart.
very nicely end. great work i will must give you 5/5.
"Oceans couldn't store a [country's] tears." - or countries'...
Very nicely written. I liked the imagery you depicted in every line and stanza--simply vivid in nature. Also, the message was outstanding in forsooth. Not much of a critique here. It's a fine work. 5/5
Hmm, I think I like it to be frank. Frank Sinatra. Seriously, good poem and great topic. How original, Karly! White hunter, black heart...that's great imagery and blah blah, but it kind of degrades the hearts of Africans. Are you saying their hearts are any different than the hearts of "White Man's"? Be careful!
OH MY GOD!, this poem was amazing. i loved the words you used, it was so vivid. and the ending was amazing. i loved the rhym sceme you used. and the last stanza was amazing!! this poem is going on my favorites. i love how it was a poem that was written about something real and the description you used was so well done, it was very vivid and i loved it. great job!!
"Nappy locks of hair and dark complexion,
African hearts the white man cannot claim,
Skin colors drastically different, but affection,
Forever dwells in white and black the same."
The story of the poem was well captured and brilliantly penned. With an unblemished flow and rhyme, powerful word choice and emotive language â€“ you delivered and enforced the message in a distinct and mature manner. Very well done, Karlo :).
Wow. i havent been speechless about a poem for quite some time,but this! wow.
i absolutely lovedt this and im going to vote for it to win the poetry contest. this is beautiful and inspiring and heartfelt and i LOVED it.
Good poem, with sort of a narrow view....... much of World history and US history left out....slavery was a worldwide problem....not just one of the US and it affected all races not just black and white.....as for the US today...we're becoming more homogenous as the years pass.....
This is beautiful...certainly one of your best by far.
The opening stanza grips the reader and pulls them in, with each stanza from there becoming more and more powerful.
The imagery portrayed creates vivid pictures, flow is flawless throughout, the whole pieces moves with such a fluid motion and the ending is hardhitting and intense...beautiful.
Yes the flow is flawless, and the abab rhyme sceme was delivered with skill in this free style poem. The repetition of "forced" and "white man" was effective in setting the tone of this piece
I believe the point was made. 5/5
Wow this was really effin amazing, I am stunned. The word choice was brillant, and the imgeray was vivid, The emtion was strong and clear, the flow was flawless, and the message was powerful, this is one of the best poems I have read all night, keep them coming. 5/5