Comments : My unanswered questions

  • 16 years ago

    by Georgi

    Aww babe i loved this. it was so simple yet so...deep at the same time! does that make sense?! haha. no really, it flowed really well and some of your description was brillaint,

    beauty, perfection, and flawless you will see,
    but when you look to the left,
    average, simple, and plain will be me.

    i LOVE the contrast between the beauty and perfection and the simple and plain that was fab, my favourite part def =]

    great work well done, i gave it a 5!

    take care
    Geo
    xoxoxoxoxoxo

  • 16 years ago

    by Alex Marlatt

    Beautiful poem. It covers all of the feelings that one gets when they want that special someone and they don't think they can have them. I love your choice of words especially how you portrayed your promises as a dream. Great job.

    Peace,
    Alex

  • 16 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Not only is this poem an expression of desire, it also tells a deep truth that in most cases inner beauty is overlooked. Thus the content was the dominant feature for me. The personal revelations added to this well written poem

  • 16 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    It hurts me to look at you,
    because your smile makes me weak,
    I want to play it off,
    but when I move my mouth I cant speak.
    [[These lines really stuck out to me. I really enjoyed them; nicely done.]]

    I like the idea of this poem. It's speaks a lot of truth that many don't understand. A few of the lines kind of sunk into the poem, rather then stuck out, but I didn't loose too much interest and I really enjoyed the thought of it overall. Nicely done.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

  • 16 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    Haha. shout it girl. oh so true. i really liked this poem. it spoke with some power. the poem itself was great.

    =] 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by bleeding limegrenn

    Hey great poem my favoret part" If you choose me,
    I promise to try my best,
    I can make you so happy,
    go ahead and put me to the test" anyway 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany C

    It was good. I liked it. It had a nice flow, the word choice was good, and I liked the format you used. I gave it a 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by Vanessa

    The word choice was simple yet effective, the emtion was clear, and strong, the flow was amazing, really this is well written, wonderfully penned. So true to life, I believe it is what's on the inside that counts, as well for beauty is only skin deep. 5/5 keep up the good work

  • 16 years ago

    by nikki

    Wow. i liked it, it had a great flow the structure was good and over all the poem was awesome. it was meaningful and true.
    my fave stanza ^_^
    Over time you will come to realize,
    that outside beauty vanishes over time,
    If you would prefer inside to out,
    then I would love to make you mine.

    it is so true what it says coz outside beauty never lasts forever. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Over time you will come to realize,
    that outside beauty vanishes over time,
    If you would prefer inside to out,
    then I would love to make you mine.
    ^^^i loved these...it just stands out to me thru out the poem...it's so true....it's the inner beauty tht matters....

    i liked the way this one flowed...smooth..
    the choice of words added to the power the poem held..

    great job m'dear
    5/5
    kp writing!
    xxPoojaxx