REALLY good poem
good rhyming
=]

This was heartfelt, really deep, and I think perhaps more people should read this, maybe it will make them think, It did me! The flow was good, but rocky in one or two places, try reading it outloud to yourself, to find places where the flow is off, the word choice was simple, yet effective, to add more power, try stepping up the vocab a bit, the emtion was deep and strong, you can tell this came from the heart, the message was clear. well written peice 5/5

Heart breaking. It's very touching. People with thouse kinds of thoughts should read this. Because all they do with suicide is carrying the pain in them on to the people who care for them. Strong poem and your emotions are hidden but screaming from every sentence. I really enjoyed this write.
Keep writing, it helps.. alot. Amazing poem!
5/5

You can not improve this poem!!! its just great!! it makes me think of me alot! its great!!!!<3

GREAT rhyming, and so emotional and touching.. Absolutely brilliant!

This is a greatly written and expressed general poem, what i mean by general is you have touched the feelings and idea of most of us. i agree with your message and im sure myself could not express it as you did it greatly.
this was a great poem, beside the great topic and message, i really love the style and the rhyme, it was too great.
you are really a talented writer. keep it up.
a 5/5 from me as you really deserve it dear.

This poem is really emotional, i swear my eyes where filling up with tears. It's really strong, and states the truth, and thats why i think it makes such an impact on the reader.

I admire how you can put such thoughts and emotions into a poem. Great work. It blew me away.

5/5

So sad i came very close to commiting suicide like deathly close but i had to sit down and realize what life truly was then realize how many loved ones would be hurt and to think how selfish it is i am glad i was able to get through it but then my cousin ended up dying that way.....i just wish he could have realized that or i could have been there for him

-laura-

Hm.
I'm not sure how I feel about this.
I for some reason liked the first part, but the second and third were way too short and could have been extended for maximum benefit to the poem and for better explination of what really happened.
Had it not been for the last two parts, I wouldn't have called it cliche.
I'd try adding to it and explaining what happened and so on.

I really liked the flow and the rhyming in the poem, though. Save for a few spots it wasn't too cliche and flowed nicely.

However, I will complain about the punctuation. What little you <did> have was wrong and then you were missing some. Punctuation, to me, is important; it helps the flow and helps the meaning.

Anyways, not too bad over all.

xTheEcstaysofSuicidex 4.5

This was a profoundly thoughtful poem. the flow was done well and the flow was great the meaning seeped out of every pour. Great job Plot121

Wow, that was well thought out, the flow was great, it had so much emoton, I really liked it! This was greatly written and it was so emotional, I loved the style~
5/5

Question: real life experience? if so I'm very sorry. That is a poem that should be published in jr. high and high school reading books. No one understands the twisted mind of a suicidal teen better than a teen. Great job. I honestly wouldn't change a thing on this one. Great work! 5/5

Really great job.. you described your emotions really well so that the reader feels your pain.. the flow was good as well as the rhymes.. it was a bit cliche but still an enjoyable read :D

5/5

This poem was a biut cliche' for me and i dont enjoy this style much anyway so perhaps it would be unfair to vote on this?

hmmm.

if you want me to vote PM me.

Wow this poem relates to me soo much..cuz i felt the same way...its a very good poem and maybe you should make it a lil longer and put more emotion in it...

Dear I am very sure that this is a true piece. I read every line with my heart and i found sheer love and grief in this piece. Your wordings and rhymes are beautiful and you got 5/5 from me.

With love
Fsams

Well i thought it was a really great
poem exept for the fact you
ended to different lines
with the word "suicide" and
i think that makes your strucure
a little messy

but i liked it alot
its flowed well and the rhyming
was great
it never seemed forced, 5/5 welldeserved

Great Poem and Beautiful ending. Its very touching and deep {it even made me cry} No-one can truly understand what some-one else is going {or went} through unless they've experienced it themselves and you did a wonderful job of bringing fourth the message behind this poem! 5/5!