I loved this, sucks that I'm in the same contest against this one, lol. One thing I noticed was:

"But I'm telling you Jesus knows best."
^^ put a comma after you it will make it flow better.

"So punish yourself something awful,
And repent for using your voice.
The crowd all notice the change in you,
But the congregation tells us it was your choice."

^^ I LOVED those lines, enough said. Lol.

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