Perhaps.

by bRiNgMeToLiFe   Jun 17, 2007


The walls are getting steeper
as the emotions in here run deeper
Digging,Digging,Digging there way into my soul
Theres nothing left for me but a vast and empty hole.
I dont know what i'm holding onto anymore
Perhaps a chance for a new life and just one open door
A crack of light shines in and I get a glimse of happiness
Perhaps I'm not just doomed for a dark and emptyness.

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  • 16 years ago

    by bRiNgMeToLiFe

    Thanks for all the comments you guys :)
    they really mean a lot.
    and im sorry about typos and punctuation stuff.
    Im horrible at that ;)

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    I can relate, very sad and deep one. You wrote it greatly, nicely expressing your emotion. My favorite lines are:
    -Digging,Digging,Digging there way into my soul
    Theres nothing left for me but a vast and empty hole.-
    ^portraying amazing image
    Well done, 5/5 from me

  • 16 years ago

    by john whalley

    Very good :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    "A crack of light shines in and I get a glimse of happiness
    Perhaps I'm not just doomed for a dark and emptyness"

    A very awesome and powerful way to end you poem.
    The flow was great. I really enjoyed it keep it up.
    Elaine.

  • 16 years ago

    by TamborineMan

    Nice poem, a few typos aside it's an enjoyable read.

    line2. I would take out 'in here'
    line3. don't capitalize every 'D'; and 'there' should be 'their
    line4. 'Theres' should be 'There's'
    line8. either take out the 'a' or take out the 'and' - as it's written it's not a proper sentence