Comments : Stars

  • 16 years ago

    by Valdo

    This is a really nice poem and well written

  • 16 years ago

    by Richard Machado

    A very cute poem, and touches on some deep emotions. To me, it seems the narrator feels their world might not accept, or will deny the love he/she shares with the other.

    I like it, but you could add more, and not compromise the meaning of the poem.

    Nicely done. Keep writing!

  • 16 years ago

    by Mel

    Aww thats so cute! again, the rhyme was awesome. i loved the lines...

    "That the stars won't shine forever
    They'll go out before we do
    And I'll be in total darkness
    Me alone without you"

    i really liked this one.

  • 16 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    That is so cute, the way you are telling a person he/she can be a star for you in ur darkness, wow...
    this was another great one by you dear

  • 16 years ago

    by Mr M

    His one is very good...direct and succinct

  • 16 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    This was really well written, it flowed so well and was utterly adorable, such a beautiful way to express ones love.
    keep writing
    love Tara-Kay
    x

  • 16 years ago

    by barbara

    Awww......i dont understand how a 14 year old can write the way you do!!! excellent...5/5!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by LuvLyLynn

    This one I love reading...I love the emotion and the flow that it has...are you sure you're 14?...lol... keep on sharing your talent... and showing you work 5/5 ^_^

  • 16 years ago

    by Zeus

    It's a sweet, well written piece. I enjoyed it greatly. Keep writing. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by nikki

    It was really well written, i absolutely loved it, you got talent girl. 5/5 the way you worded the stanza'a were amazing, just one thing on this line

    So big and wide and clear

    i think it should be

    So big, wide and clear

    having to and's there just doesn't sound right, it sorta takes out the description, but it was beautifully written, keep up the good work.

  • 16 years ago

    by Kara P

    That was beutiful! You are very talented!

    My heart explodes with love

    I loved that line!

    It was a very good poem!

    ;)
    Kara

  • 16 years ago

    by Spirit

    *sniff*
    Oh so sad
    great job
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by The Joker

    A truly wonerful poem . It is filled with a great metallic taste which is rare for even me to find. It's filled with great emtion. Keep it up.;)

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    This poem is very cute. It made me smile. But even though everything is amazing and your so-in-love.. everything has an end, you put that in here like a silent reminder but then you had a happy ending. I really liked it. Your rhyming was really good. it helped the poem a lot. made it a lot stronger.

    this is my favorite part:

    That the stars won't shine forever
    They'll go out before we do
    And I'll be in total darkness
    Me alone without you

    Excellent

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Not

    I love this poem its so sweet and the last to lines in the last stanza made say aww!!!...=)..5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by crystaljean88

    This is a very sweet poem. i liked it alot. it was short but to the point. i like poems that r like that 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Michael

    A nice poem =).

  • 16 years ago

    by Mr Rhee

    I remember that feeling, from so long ago. Thanks for bringing that back to mind. You do that so well.

  • 15 years ago

    by LiisaMariie143

    Gosh another great poem. this one is really cute too. your poems just flow so great. your rhymes are really good too! 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by PRiNCESS SKiTTLEZ

    =] gOoD pOeM !!