This is very interesting and I enjoyed singing it in that tune. Your wordings are amazing. I know its hard to write such cute raps but you managed to do it the best. Great 5/5

You know what hunny?
You're crazy and it fits perfectly to the song and these are better of lyrics than the original...hehe

Really good work sweetie
Love and miss ya
Your friend,
Laura

This very interesting poem. I just sang it in that tune and its cool.

It is different because I have never read any lyrics before. It is still very good. and another thing, I am not into rap. But it as a poem was magnificant! I give it 5/5 anyway! lol The rhymeing was good and The flow was great. Good job! Keep up the good poems!

Hey its great to read something so different - I could definitely see that working out with what you've got there. I enjoyed reading it. Great job.

Nice. good luck with the song.
i'll look out for it in the stores ;)

anywho i liked 'rap 1' very inventive

i'd liek to know what this is about though....

That Was Cool...Found MySelf Singin It =D....Get A ReMixed Record Deal....I Find (Good)Original Rap Hard To Find..Nice Job..

I'd love to actually hear this. It reads amazingly, and I can tell the rap parts are fantastic. The chorus is my favorite, though. =] Great job! 5/5

This is a pretty interesting lyrics...i liked it a lot a 5/5

This is a wonderful rap and I feel as if you are singing!

The words seem to flow perfectly well.

Keep it up