We Were

by Nathan Turner   Jun 21, 2007


We were great when we were together, and I remember your face when I said together, forever
It lit up like a million Christmas trees but what would happen in the future only god fore-sees.

You raised me up but will you help me back down, before I crash land back on the solid surface, you certainly put me back in my place.

Its not so easy getting over you, but I know how much pain you're going through too. I'll be sitting, waiting, longing for you to return, just to see your gorgeous blue eyes for one last time, was loving you really such a dreadful crime?!

It's all because of you that I did this, you and your stupid kiss. No girl can break my heart but after al the things you said you pierce it with your love dart. You hurt me so much that I shiver with fear and shed a tear when I think of your touch.

It all finished in a flash, tears were cried, words were said, then we departed to bed, with one another in our head. Then a couple of months down the line you came along again, I was happy with a girl but you popped up, said things, but you never put doubt in my mind to who I would chose. But I'm sorry you're the one to lose.

Why did you decide to say those things? I was feeling great though missing the one I love, me and her are as close as a hand in a glove.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Aimee Dawn

    I thought the poem was really good.
    I like how you rhymed, but not too much.
    The only suggestion would be to separate
    the lines perhaps.
    It shows where to end and start.

  • 16 years ago

    by Faith Davis

    Wow i liked this one a lot also!

    ~faith

  • 16 years ago

    by Mezmeryz

    Wow this is so sad, but sweet, especially the last line. i enjoyed the detail, and the emotions touched deep. keep it up =]
    nuff luv xx 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Lover Boii

    It has a lot of emotion in it, and some contrast feelings. I like it a lot. Keep up the good work.

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by PygmyPuff

    There are so many references to outside elements. Its like a walking metaphore, its amazing. The strusture is strange, but youre consistant so you must like it. It just doesnt designate where the reader should put emphasist. I would recomentd trying to create more more traditional structure while maintaing your own personal flair.

    {5/5}

    [PymgyPuff]