Comments : Waiting for the Moment

  • 16 years ago

    by On Cupids Bad Side

    Very good poem, I'm surprised no one has commented on it yet. It was extremely sweet. Short but sweet =) I loved it.

    Good job 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    I like it, 'love moves in mysterious ways' (sp) xD

    You really express a lot in this poem, well done. Flow was smooth ^_^

    keep up the good work 5/5!

  • 16 years ago

    by unknown

    Nice and sweet poem. Although the flow was a lil bit off, it's enjoyable poem.
    well done. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    To me the structure was quite different and unusal and the flow was a little off in some area. Although from those two things I did find the emotion to be quite deep and expressive. Really powerful with the form of love so I did like it. Simple word choice and short yet effective. A good effort. ~mel

  • 16 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    Well done Paul.
    It was short and sweet.
    You got the message out well although the flow was a little off and the wording could be better.
    I still liked.

    Written Beatifully.
    Paula.Alexis.Elaine. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Fsams

    Wow this is outstanding with simple and sweet wordings. I loved the flow and the message is crystal clear. 5/5 for sure. tc

  • 16 years ago

    by Michelle18

    Awww this poem is really sweet...im sure if you wrote this poem about a special girl,she'd love it..i know i did...great job! 5/5

    ~michelle~`

  • 16 years ago

    by Boy

    Yes , you are in love. and now share it to who you want to sahre. nice use of words. and nise feelings. to make you love one know about your new love.

    take care
    you deserve 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by my name is Llama

    I like how we see your thoughts progress slowly throughout the poem and we see the decisions and feelings you are writing about. well done xoxo

  • 16 years ago

    by Birgit

    Aww =] Really nice that you just write what you were thinking, and that it turns out this cute ^^ Keep up the good work. Just one little thing, isn't is supossed to be "feelings" instead of feeling? =) Anyway 5/5!
    xxx

  • 16 years ago

    by Andrew Morton

    Overall, an amazing poem, theres one thing i would look at though

    "all I come to do is think of when might
    I be able to see you"

    it just seems to fit the rest of the flow...but other than those lines there..the rest of it is completely flawless, great work man

  • 16 years ago

    by ECILA ice

    Hey i really love this lines coz i can somehow relate on this one
    "Meeting you wasnt some thing that I planned,
    but I was lucky to meet you.
    Now the thing is I dont clearly understand
    these feeling for you."

    Another thing, i like the message on your poem it was sweet..it was simple, the flow is smooth but still like it coz it speaks directly to someone's heart.Keep it up!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Kirsty palmer

    Awww i really liked this poem, it was so sweet, and beautifully penned! i love the way that you showed how you wasnt sure if it was love at the beginning, i can really relate keep it up.. 5/5
    xXx

  • 16 years ago

    by Synh

    'all I come to do is think of when might
    I be able to see you.'

    Revise that sentence. I sounds like you're missing a word or two somewhere in there.

    This was such a sweet and light hearted poem. When I read it, I got this image in my head of like a 15 year guy falling in love with a girl in his class haha. Anyway, awesome poem. I think the flow was a little bit off because it didn't sound like love in the end, more like a 'hey, i really like you and could maybe one day love you' kinda poem. It was good though :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Spirit

    Strong poem full of emotions and i just loved it. i wish that it was a bit longer although it was fine just the way it was. 5/5 good job geeting down what you had to say in so few words.

  • 16 years ago

    by Tragic Misery

    Aw this is really cute

  • 16 years ago

    by luv Shelbz luv

    AWWWWW that is sweet and very emotional for a guy 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Dian PH

    Yes trully cute

  • 16 years ago

    by S R P

    This was really sweet. Good job on it :)