Very good emotion depth and power were put in this poem and you did an excellent job 5/5

laura

This was sad indeed!!!The feelings which you have described are so deep.It was truely good.You have captured and bestowed them which is very well done!!!
Good job in this piece
All the best
And take care

You are very talented, and this poem shows how gifted you are too, you have a way with different styles and i love it! Well done on another superb write
love Tara-Kay
xxxxx

I dont really know what to say about this poem, but i dont really like it all to much persnally, because why would you spend time with someone who wants to hurt you, 4/5

I dont really know what to say about this poem, but i dont really like it all to much persnally, because why would you spend time with someone who wants to hurt you, 4/5

Wonderful love poem, with beautifully expressed emotions and great choice of words.
You write very sweet love poetry.
5/5, truly deserved

Wording is great, I like it very much. This peace is very emotional and unique which is excellent. 5/5

Cool poem. I understand where you are coming from on this one. I gave it a 5/5.

With every poem i see more and more of the artist inside i love your wirtting its absolutly ahmazing.. whicked good. keep it up! XD

Great, well adhered to the rule and well written. It rhymes well and flows well. Great piece indeed.

Everyday I hide the fact that I am falling apart.
The thought of telling you makes my head reel.
You don't know that I love you with all my heart.
I wish I could tell you that I am able to feel.

Catching lines

I love the emotions in it :D it was pretty good for your First Triple Triolet :) you did a great job.

It burns inside when you are thinking of her instead of me.
^^Powerful line.. Fantastic work

5/5!

Strong feelings and emotions in this you did a good job for your first triolet :)

Oh my gosh. i love this poem. i can relate. and this type of technique i have never heard about. i think i'll try it. its amazing. strong emotions come through and i can feel it. amazing piece of work.

Good poem. This was good for your first triolet, and you still took the challenge of making it a triple triolet. You done it very well and that shows true talent. I also loved the emotions you expressed here. 5/5

Take Care && Thanks for the comment.

-Shannon <3

It was really deep and had so many emotions in it...I loved it...The flow was just flawless through out the whole thing....I've never heard of this type of poem before...I think I might try it...

Anyway...Really Good Job 5/5

Very intresting poem its the first triolet I have read and I really enjoyed the repitition really had a grate affect on the way the poem wad read the only thing I think would make this poem better would be to put a few les full stops and a few more commas.

Quite good to tell you the truth for your first attempt at this style and creating a triple triolet. A nicely penned piece you have here, indeed an interesting love poem. I'm sure many can relate to this. Well done keep up the good work~mel

Beautifully written.
love it.
5/5

You gave me all of your good poems to read.
sorry scrach out good and replace with great. next time trust some of your older
poems. but don't worry i'm gulity of it to

So much depth to this poem such a beautiful jon you did!!